#i wish snow didn’t melt

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pine merlin
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i wish snow didn’t melt,
that all is enveloped in white,
covered like a boundless blanket,
embracing everything inside.

i wish snow didn’t melt,
that winter won’t fade to spring,
that snowflakes would continue to fall,
gently kissing people’s skin.

i wish snow didn’t melt,
that we could still play around like kids,
snowball fights, making snow angels,
what growing up forbids.

but snow does melt.
and so do the memories it holds,
the stories sealed in each grain,
melting into puddles below.

innocence no longer frozen,
now maturing with time,
speeding through spring, summer, fall,
unknowingly age climbs.

though snow will come again,
drifting down on people’s heads,
but past memories will never be identical,
only to reminisce, unable to duplicate.

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hoping to receive some feedback and comments!
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naive coral
rancid tuskBOT
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*It's a great poem, looks

simple but it goes deeper

as you read through it*

- that.c3lest
pine merlin
frosty notch
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Wow! I really love this I love the way you used snow as a (sorry if I’m wrong) Metaphor, it really shows that memories can only last a certain amount of time before there gone. Like childhood. I love the second last stanza my favourite line been “Innocence no longer frozen,
Now maturing with time” ahh it’s perfect!!
Definitely needs to go on the Starboard!

unborn bear
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I really love your poem for the way you express the lovingness you had when the snow didn't melt

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The desire for it to stay like that

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And then the reality hits

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Real good transitioning

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Love the rhythm, good abcb rhyme flow

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Overall a job well done

pine merlin
pine merlin
median osprey
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Wow.. what a wonderful poem

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I love the way that you use snow as a metaphor for all our past memories, that just like the snow would never be the same again

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Keep up the good work

pine merlin
kind swallow