Last Dance

[tepid hill]

https://docs.google.com/document/d/13EpWuRrak_rJ3XUazoKM_jq4M_ykV1oHvNOi7aDIfhI/edit

[wraith saffron]

I tead it. It was amazing! I like how you poured out all emotions. Hope, dejection and much more.

[tepid hill]

Thankssss

I really enjoy this poem conceptually. The rhyme schemes and the flow are very on point. The message is felt and there is an emotional weight behind your words.

On how you can improve, maybe try using some descriptive imageries that convey what you're saying without directly saying it:

For example:
Instead of saying "life is full of darkness without you."

Say: Life is a realm of shadows in your absence.

Or something like that.

[wraith saffron]

Or, when I walk in light, my footsteps are black.

This enhances your poetry.

[tepid hill]

Ohh thanks so much