Short poem about healing (unnamed) | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

shell atlas Dec 12, 2023, 4:03 AM

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Healing comes in increments
The small tick of a clock,
Etching towards the tippy top.
Careful now, or it'll knock a notch down
Have patience to reach the top
In life,
A rushed attempt slaps you tenfold
Drop you down to the cold depths,
Fending for yourself.

Healing comes in increments
Someday you'll look back,
See how far you've risen.
The small tick of a clock,
Cheering you on
As you slowly reach the top
Never forget
How far you've come,
How much time was invested,
But keep on moving up
Someday you'll reach the tippy top.

In my head, I imagine a tiny person standing on the minute hand of a massive clock. It's nice to think about.

past valley Dec 12, 2023, 4:10 AM

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I really like the analogy, what kind of feedback do you want? (Positive/negative/mix)

frozen pewterBOT Dec 12, 2023, 4:10 AM

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*I really like the

analogy, what kind of

feedback do you want?*

past valley Dec 12, 2023, 4:10 AM

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LMAO ITS A HAIKU

shell atlas Dec 12, 2023, 4:11 AM

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How'd you do that? Lol

past valley Dec 12, 2023, 4:11 AM

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I don’t know…

shell atlas Dec 12, 2023, 4:11 AM

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Any kind of feedback is good

mellow verge Dec 12, 2023, 4:11 AM

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The bot sees all lmao

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I pictured an iceberg until I read the paragraph

willow impBOT Dec 12, 2023, 4:13 AM

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mellow verge I pictured an iceberg until I read the paragraph

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mellow verge Dec 12, 2023, 4:13 AM

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Yippee

past valley Dec 12, 2023, 4:13 AM

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alright, again the analogy is really cool, but it doesn’t read the best in my opinion. A clock’s hands goes up AND down

past valley Dec 12, 2023, 4:13 AM

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mellow verge I pictured an iceberg until I read the paragraph

I totally see that

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I think it’s really good though, I’m bad at analogies so you’ve done well in my book

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Didn’t mean to respond to you Apollo sorry

mellow verge Dec 12, 2023, 4:15 AM

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I say that because of this line

“A rushed attempt slaps you ten fold—- to the cold depths”

past valley Dec 12, 2023, 4:15 AM

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Yeah

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Op disappeared lol

mellow verge Dec 12, 2023, 4:16 AM

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Overall it’s a nice poem and analogy I can see where it’s leading.

shell atlas Dec 12, 2023, 4:21 AM

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I was reading other poems. Thanks for the feedback! It didn't take long to write so it definitely needs work

shell atlas Dec 12, 2023, 4:23 AM

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mellow verge I pictured an iceberg until I read the paragraph

Why is that?

mellow verge Dec 12, 2023, 4:23 AM

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mellow verge I say that because of this line “A rushed attempt slaps you ten fold—- to the c...

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shell atlas Dec 12, 2023, 4:24 AM

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Ohh

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Okay I'll work on that part. And the analogy too.

willow impBOT Dec 12, 2023, 4:24 AM

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shell atlas Okay I'll work on that part. And the analogy too.

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crude granite Dec 12, 2023, 4:31 AM

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This poem reads like a nursery rhyme which I adore — also I love the reception of the lines that you used, it adds a sort of whimsy and excitement to the poem. Also I love the way you used enjambment and splitting up the lines t emphasize things. The poem has a great flow. You should be very proud 🥹✊

#Short poem about healing (unnamed)