#(Seun) Satisfaction Overdose

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quiet hawk
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“Wowee, what a blast~”

Midst of the corner,
Where nobody could ever shudder,
An image pops up in the mental landscape,
Something that can only rise and escalate.

Sensations are mountain high peaked,
Fire keeping it going and flowing,
So after the moments are done,
What did you truly gain?

“Man, this keeps going on~”

Time dashes to dozens of laps,
Each sight higher than ever on the scale,
Pink-blossoms are the signs of an intense express,
Although things can’t keep going on like this.

“Say, why was I ever like this?”

The marathon of days looped on and on,
Efforts to sustain the summit drags on too far,
The torch should’ve never been lit,
So such a pitying scene would dearly fit.

Arms, limbs, all are imbrewed with stained curses,
Wash them away, the mind still remembers scars like clear day,
On the day the action is fulfilled,
Meaning of existence took joys away with the sorrowful realization.

“If I’m just like this for life, why do I live?”

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@rich yoke hey, you think this contains explicit and/or sexualized language or imagery?

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I ran it on chatgpt and it says it's clear, but just double-checking

rich yoke
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i dont think so

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but a mod might want it in sensitive possibly not fs tho

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i love it though it's an amazing poem the 2nd to last stanza is deff my favorite

quiet hawk
rich yoke
quiet hawk
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I'll still take your words to heart

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you got this

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lay it on me

rich yoke
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i feel like the subtle hints at why am i alive might do it plus mentions of scars but i dont really know i genuinely slumpped

quiet hawk
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So it might sound suicidal?

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Also the scars were metaphorical

rich yoke
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i know but like i feel like it might come off weird yk like the light line might trigger ppl yk but also at the same time im pretty sure its ok

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yk

quiet hawk
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yeah I get it

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Alright thanks for the advice, I might just move it then

rich yoke
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id keep it for now

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maybe just repost it to clear chat for more feedback honestly

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so this convo isnt there