#Exchanging Favors

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autumn iron
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Collab by Spooky Wolf + Scooby

The canes came flying through,
past the sugar mills in an old mans hand,
crystal and wood together in a greyish blue.

Painted polka dots unveiled through curtains,
brittle chips of bone in rainbow frenzy,
it all came raining down in plenty.
Lollipops, lonely thoughts and prayers,
made from factory floors and empty to its core.

Sermons: Robotic. Candy coated prosperity. Tickle trickle down!
It went on and on, down rusty pipes, with frowns that smelter.
From frolic fields, to machinery, "don't worry boy" "riches be your destiny!"
For what you envision is bleak and pale, broken down, old and stale.

As you look at the callouses on your hand,
that fill hour glasses from waves of sand,
hear the echoes of abandoned
parents
telling children stories to the ghosts of doctors.
They remember those needles,
dripping from what was once polka dot to seas of blood

Far away Oh, to let you go,
in split up seas without serenity,
the door sits in that liquid,
where thousands of faces are attached and screaming,
the nob is pushed and opened through.
A forest tipped its hat and said hello.
Green fingers caressing the grey hair,
his wrinkly finger curled as he says, "come closer",
from young to old do you wish to change so soon?

Little sprouts bend and whimper,
as the cane bangs down with all of his might.
He too raises his finger,
but I,
oh I will linger.

supple stirrup
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It is just as perfect, it is a masterpiece for me. It looks beatiful and wonderful to read. ❤️

mental dew
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I liked the over all poem. I got the idea of losing the spirit (as in going further from the traditional) but I might be off.

Sermons: Robotic. Candy coated prosperity. Tickle trickle down!
It went on and on, down rusty pipes, with frowns that smelter.
From frolic fields, to machinery, "don't worry boy" "riches be your destiny!"
For what you envision is bleak and pale, broken down, old and stale.

This part was really nice.
And the "polka dots" being mentioned twice and the second times its refering to blood droplets... that made the idea stronger imo cuz polka dots = traditional...

The second to last stanza kinda confused me tho... The first thing that popped into my head was "nature appreciates the traditional way more" but it can be interpreted as a lost life cuz of the last sentence.

south flicker