Ella

[olive jetty]

wow this is pretty good, nice description of that person

[amber fog]

really? thank you

[amber fog]

Ella

[weary hornet]

Damn so beautifullll

Actually the fact ur a short poet

I'll give feedback

It's a beautiful description, But as a short poet myself, I believe u can present this even more beautifully!!

[amber fog]

in what way

[weary hornet]

I mean the usage of words can be more appropriate, ex: the line 'is our love artificial or'
The 'or' messes the flow and it would better if u put or on the next line. Well that is just my suggestion but kudos 👏

Plus I think the words u choose to use to describe this person, can be better words that say more; As a short poet u would know how much it matters for each word to have more meaning

[amber fog]

okay thank you I'll definitely revise

[weary hornet]

[amber fog]

@weary hornet
edited it how's it

[weary hornet]

That's better!!