#Cartoons

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tight gulch
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My entire life feels unreal like a child's cartoon
The sun seems to rise and lower to quickly ending my night to soon
In my own villainous way of being the hero I live by the light of the moon
I can tell your afraid as your heart ebbs and flows like the ocean waves or winds monsoon
So take my hand as my heart and hold it close so it'd your lucky boon
So let our love rest in this Chrysalize then fly from this cocoon

My days as a kid have passed but my life with you is my favorite cartoon
I'm eager to see the next chapter as the previous one ended to soon
take my hand close and dance with me so I can be your devil in the light of the moon
Push and pull me but I'll never leave, I am your mountain and your my monsoon
When you can't see me know im still there as I've gave you my devils boon
feel my warmth even in my absence and hold me close until we leave this cocoon

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umbral marten
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Chrysalize would go better than crystalize

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But overall, good work. A+

tight gulch
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I think it was a typo I write everything in one pass 😅

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@umbral marten thank you I edited it it must have been a typo 😅😅

umbral marten
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Rest in this?

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Then it's chrysalis

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@tight gulch

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Chrysalize is the verb form of that word

tight gulch
umbral marten
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Do whatever you want I don't matter.

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You do.

elfin pewter
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Exceptional writing, could feel those words from inside, lol I think you need to replace some tos to too

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But other than that spelling, it's perfect