(sodo) Desolation

[cosmic copper]

Seein "trepidation and dilapidation" makes my gremlin brain happy but ıdk why so the first verse is my favorite. Night and day and the idea of wanting to being away from self but not in a dying way

I would love to know what inspied you to write this piece

looks pretty interesting

[prisma cosmos]

@cosmic copper I picked desolation as a topic and tried to describe my individual experience within those boundaries. It's truthfully my heart and soul spilled out on paper, as I think all poetry should be.

My love of God protects me from being vulgar in how I decided to want to express my feeling of self hatred.

I consider each poem a microcosm of my soul, with an attempt to imprint upon the imaginations of those who will listen a message of courage in the face of an unimaginable adversary - one's own self.

And how random, but I just watched Gremlins for the first time a few days ago :p

[cosmic copper]

I completely agree, poetry is the image we get to see painted by the soul of the poet. I can even go ahead and say its a gift. Thanks for the explanation ^^

[prisma cosmos]

You're welcome! And thank you so much for your warm words.

I may be gifted, but we all are. Every one has a paintbrush, and the world is their canvas.

[cosmic copper]

you got some fancy words here I kinda struggle with understanding it but instinctively it makes me feel despair with hope

sorry for not being able to give proper feedback but its really nice

[prisma cosmos]

No worries, and that was the general idea. The despair comes from those parts of yourself that you'd rather forget, but can't. But the Sun will come up, tomorrow, bet your bottom dollar.

[oak jacinth]

I like your Shakespearian prose. You're descriptive like mine. It's interesting to read mostly because the lines are lengthy and the total amount of stanzas are short.

There's a small handful of grammatical mistakes that could make it easier to read but other than that I find no quarrels in this poem.

[prisma cosmos]

Thank you! I appreciate that. I don't really attempt to follow Shakespeare, and earlier today I was thinking I'd never be as good as that. But truly, I have never felt more alive listening to Hamlet when I was finally able to understand what the words meant, and the depth of emotion by which Hamlet expresses literally everything, even greeting a friend he hadn't seen in a long while.

Since then, I've had a love for words, and their source, the overlying higher power of wisdom of spirit.

[past viper]

Wonderful! @prisma cosmos has just pregressed to level 5!