#I wish

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normal cliff
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How do we find this? I’m planning on posting it but I’m not sure yet! <@&1145760802666717234>

I wish I didn’t meet you.
I wish didn’t know that smile of yours
When I say something funny.
I wish I didn’t feel what I feel
when you look at me.
I wish I didn’t notice the sparks
in your eyes when you talk about
Something you absolutely love.
I wish I didn’t know what things
You love and the things you don’t.
I wish I didn’t care;
I wish it didn’t affect me so much
When I realized that
You didn’t love me the way
I loved you back.

night blaze
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I think it’s a very genuine poem with a lot of heartbreak. Don’t think you need “when I say something funny” line three is strong enough on its own. On a personal level: maybe no punctuation on certain lines? Like “when you look at me” without a period not only fits a sentence but says a phrase that implies a heavy feeling. I liked the poem though. Usually on this server I don’t enjoy reading poems like this but you’ve evoked a mix genuine sadness and heartbreak along with still being in love poem just hit bro thank you for sharing ⭐️

tranquil surge
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I think you should. It's a nice piece.

normal cliff
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