Cracked Lens

[solid latch]

this cracked lens
sees the world in a new way.
a unique perspective of the world,
one that no one else will ever experience.

this cracked lens
sees the world in a broken way.
a perspective that is disjointed and blurred,
something no one should have.

this cracked lens
has a secret world hidden behind it.
a new view of the world
and the problems we face.

this cracked lens
has been opened up to the hardships it must face
while being seen as different.
the cruel, harsh reality we live in.

this cracked lens
was left abandoned when it needed help.
the pleas for a better life ignored
and shoved to the side while called Dramatic.

this cracked lens
has been given new opportunities.
ones you would never believe existed
nor would you think would be within the reach of something so disjointed.

(this poem is about how I view the world as someone who has a severe vision impairment and how I view the world and what I've learnt)

[cyan pine]

the content is beautiful but the delivery is... i know ryhming i tiring but all in all it's good af

sorry

i'm very sleepy so my sentence's is confusing

[solid latch]

I'm not the best with rhyming 😭
all the poetry I write is free verse

[surreal pebble]

*I'm not the best with

rhyming 😭 all the poetry

I write is free verse*

- ut_died_rip

[cyan pine]

my reccomendation is atleast put one ryhming line

it wouldn't hurt

[cyan pine]

dw i feel the same

[solid latch]

true true I know what you mean

[cyan pine]

have a fun writting

goodnight

[solid latch]

night :)

[hot sparrow]

Overall this is solid.
Do notice:
"These cracked lenses."
Repeating ruins the theme since it turns cliche'.
Try saying it differently:
" Fractures in my aquarium"

Instead of " Has a secret world hidden behind it."
"Portal to different dimensions".

Aside from some spelling mistakes this has great potential, keep going!

[solid latch]

thank you ❤️

I make a lot of typing errors :')

it's normal for me

thanks for the ideas