peak pier
A ghost of who I was,
now I roam around.
Questioning my existence
and the whispers in my head.
With every passing second
I feel less control.
Am losing myself now
somebody take me home.
I don't know what i did,
but all i see is red.
All those whispers I heard
are slowly fading out.
A ghost is all I am now,
a beautiful display
of hatred, pain, and guilt
on a roadway to hell.
feel free to give criticism
crystal crane
hold on, i'll go read this tommorow.
vestal kayak
Sooo, take this with a pinch of salt because i am new to poetry myself but...i like the theme, i live the way you say "But all i see is red" thats my favorite line
I just think it would be better if you out a bit more content, like i start to imagine what you write, but before i can properly set the scene in my head, you sentences are already over
But again, its my own opinion, others are more expert at this than i am
marsh forge
i love the rhyming here
peak pier
Sooo, take this with a pinch of salt because i am new to poetry myself but...i l...
Noted thanks❤
peak pier
i love the rhyming here
Thankss😊
peak pier
hold on, i'll go read this tommorow.
Okii
willow canopy
I like the use of quatrains. The speaker's pain is effectively forefront and center. Nice work.