#Bells

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gray ravine
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The cold embrace wake's me up the dark. empty fields to walk throughout the darkness is a mistake to navigate the darkness is an idiot thought. oh how I yearn to see the path to find some sort of guidance. Yet I don't recall having ever got there the first place...

The silent is deafening. yet I hear something. The humming of a melody
The lullaby I heard before. But from where or even when. Does time even flow
I felt like time just stop...

A flash... And here again now in a house
A woman with no face is talking to me?
The chill went down my spine and someone walk through me... That person
Has no face along with the woman. Yet he's oddly familiar. The same melody I hear it more clearly is this perhaps a memory? Are they my parents...

Ughh. This sudden pain! My head it feels as if its about to split apart. Ughh. The pain is getting unbearable. Why am I feeling this pain... The melody change to ringing bells. These bells... They follow the same pattern as church bells. Their so loud that it's causing me immense pain....

The wonderful melody the melody. the melody.. the melody...

I remember now...

That woman. that lady is my darling. my lover. my one and only. I died the darkness is death. My darlings melody is guiding me to peace. And yet I don't want to go. Not yet. I'll stay I'll bite through the pain. Just to keep listening to your voice darling

Than the bells ring louder...

Oh my sweet melody being deafen by the bells of death... To hear my darlings melody once again is to accept the rings of the church bells...

To accept death so I can listen to you're voice... what a sick twisted way to contradict myself...

Till death do us apart

quasi lava
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Pain is the glory of love.

gray ravine
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Death won't even make a man lose he's love

quasi lava
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But I am quite offended by this poem

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I find it in ballad form

gray ravine
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How so...

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Perhaps I didn't mean to do it on purpose...

quasi lava
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Cause I find it opposite to my character.

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I know

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I understand

gray ravine
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Because I was writing it on sleep deprivation...

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And maybe I made you shed a tear

quasi lava
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You made.

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Go sleep.

gray ravine
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I refuse

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Go check Philippines time

quasi lava
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Oh

wicked girder
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Oh my

keen willow
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8:27

vital wedge
wicked girder
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It's so so descriptive

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I love it so much

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A tad bit emotional at points, a tab bit sad, sorrow and grief I read

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I love the end..

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It's perfect heart

gray ravine
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The game starts now

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Bells

hasty prawn
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Ooo ending is very nice

gray ravine
hasty prawn
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Alr

vital wedge
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Its very complex bro

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But it's good the imagery and the tone is cold so yaah 6 out of 10

gray ravine
vital wedge
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Yap.

gray ravine
vital wedge
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Things missing for me is the ryme scheme is little weird for me . Like sorry but weak

gray ravine
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It in balled

vital wedge
gray ravine
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Alright fair I'll make the next one rym

vital wedge
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Yaah it's nice

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What u think about mine let's go there and comment