#Her

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silent portal
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Her dress is softer than the clouds,
and her heels like a stark mountain top.
Her body is of an hourglass,
where the sand does not move
but you find yourself sinking in its place.

Her lips are the galaxy,
vast in space and I am the gravity.
Her eyes are enchanting,
they tell a story like your favorite book,
with each page a mystery to be turned.

Her speech is enlightening,
enough to make an altercation of two groups stop and think.
Her knowledge is vaster than the speed of light
and her soul is crystalline and pure,
It sings no wrong and all that you long for.

You and me are all we need.
You and me, and all's complete.

mellow axle
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I liked what you were going for here. Did you personify an altercation in the third stanza? Because that is kinda cool.
Vaster than the speed of light is an interesting idea.
I would perhaps have made a special stanza for the last two lines, because the addressee is changed. Nice poem, well done.

silent portal
fossil hill
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Pov: tachyon

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Emotional, specified yet abstract imagery, i love it

mellow axle
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"to make an altercation stop and think"

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Giving personal qualities to an object or thing or even abstract object.

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