Void will

[summer fog]

Here is a thought.
Shut in.
Shut up.
Shut down.
Blocked up.
No pain. No sense. No smell. No taste.
What is the thought?

Dark. No.
Quiet. No.
Scentless. No.
Out of touch?
Tasteless…

When did it begin?
If memory remains
it may fill the blank for limited thoughts to contain.
Is it all input
and output?

If this was the start -
What would remain?
Who? Why?
I.

[warm oracle]

Stunning! That ending is PERFECTION!!! Is there any specific feedback you'd like for this one?

[devout moon]

This is beautiful

[summer fog]

Not sure, I appreciate any feedback on it.

[devout moon]

The theme and structure

Is just perfect

[low hemlock]

It is amazing the sense of hopelessness is strong and overall it is a powerful poem

[devout moon]

This is by far the best poem i've seen here so far

[summer fog]

I appreciate all your feedback, but if you have time, some time. Maybe I would like a narration. Your dramatic voice is so cool.

[summer fog]

I appreciate that

[low hemlock]

This is one of the best poems I have read

[devout moon]

Yeah

[summer fog]

would you believe it if I told you, you inspired me to write this one

[devout moon]

I did?

[summer fog]

Yes, your poetry

[devout moon]

An honor

[devout moon]

In what ways tho?

I can't imagine

[summer fog]

Difficult to say, but I thought of this poem after reading three of yours

even if only vaguely

I thought about thoughts

and that lead to will and sense

[devout moon]

Oh

Wow

Thats an honor

Idk what to say

[devout moon]

This

My poems were disoriented, enigmatic, hidden

Yours

Structured, rhythmic, intellectual

[proud sail]

Wonderful! @devout moon has just pregressed to level 5!

[devout moon]

Great job

[summer fog]

I appreciate it. I may have my style and you, yours, but that's what I love about it. We give expression.

[devout moon]

True

I hate how some people prioritize form and regulation and grammar to the raw, emotional expression

[loud fox]

Yea, its poetry, why are people insisting we write prose? idgi

[wise bridge]

*Yea, its poetry,

why are people insisting

we write prose? idgi*

- noizeslut

[warm oracle]

I'm a huge fan of spooky's work!

[warm oracle]

ON MY WAY!

[warm oracle]

I'm curious to see what you think of my own work sometime, search " 'Val " in post own or sensitive sometime - note for my unique grammar, if you listen along to a narration you'll catch on fast (and hyphens, en/em dashes are pauses).

[warm oracle]

I think people miss devices if they aren't glaringly obvious sometimes. I know I used to miss rhymes ALL the time because they were hidden between lines. HECK, I even used to have problem reading line to line, stanza to stanza fluidly! Once I started doing both, I opened A LOT of doors into contemporary poetry (don't even get me started on symbolism/surrealist poetry which I used to dislike and now love).

[loud fox]

Well, iambic pentameter with defined line structure, grates me. Few rhythmic devices are more hideous to me tbh

If there isn't at least some enjambment present I probably won't like it at all tbh

[loud fox]

Meter without enjambment is H2S

[devout moon]

I loved I am not the Sun I am the Shore

And your other works as well

I like the way how you dissolute paragraphs and grammar

And I absolutely enjoy ur voice

[warm oracle]

omg same sometimes! though some stuff passes for me if it pulls it off just right