#Do I Know You?

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ancient gust
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Forget and forgive. That's what I need to do.
But how can I forgive when I already forgot?

When I can't remember your transgressions?
When it comes to you I don't know a lot…

I don't bother going near you.
I don't trust that it's not a facade.

But you won't go away. It makes me upset.
Yer I feel a connection, but it feels… odd…

I've buried my feelings so deep I can't remember,
Is this feeling love or hate?

Am I rejecting how I feel?
Or do I just not want to see your face?

You act like you care,
You act like you know me,

But I don't know what's going on!
I don't know if I can trust what I see…

For memory is fickle,
And I don't know if I hate you.

I've decided I'll just ignore you till you're gone,
Till your memory betrays you too…

wintry ermine
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it's good but i can't help but feel something is missing

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nyxie can prolly give you a better feedback

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for me it's good, 8/10

celest spoke
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I’m not very good at giving feedback, but I’ll do my best

wintry ermine
celest spoke
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I think it’s very good, I can feel your frustration and anger with this person. I can feel the confusion as well, not knowing how you feel about the situation

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I think all that’s missing is a bit of a backstory that help you connect to it, like perhaps if this person was a past lover or a past best friend, other than that I think it is great

wintry ermine
sly hemlock
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Aigh

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Les see qut the hype is about

ancient gust
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(There's not much hype- it's mediocre at best lmao)

sly hemlock
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Wow

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That's actually pretty good

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I don't bother going near you. I don't trust that it's not a facade

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These are my favourite lines

ancient gust
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Yooo

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Neat

ancient gust
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i like it :D

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is it about your memory/thoughts about the person changing all the time and emotions being unpredictable, hence "forgetting" him?

ancient gust
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It issss

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i like it :D

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its cool

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Thank youuuu

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one suggestion might be to lean a bit more into the transgressions that were committed and your feelings at the times of those transgressions

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but othe than that i find it to be a goo poem

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good*

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Alr

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Thank you

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👍

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Also I am almost done with my current poems :>

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will read

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Would you want me to @ you in it?

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sure