#Complex Canvas

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sinful lodge
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I've been inspired by this Discord Channel.. this one's for you guys

Watch the video of the poem here:
https://drive.google.com/file/d/1cuHEZvl2iE9DDBV6ycMbVmIfH0AC_0ru/view?usp=sharing

Do enjoy.

"Blank slates, painted first impressions, and an unfamiliar complex.

A firm easel foundation, tainted with golden gesso stationed quad deck,

Prepped application, an accepting acrylic - though a sacrilegious step,

Committed due diligence, withholding dark pigment, feelings dyed and wept,

A unique impasto, thick layers of truth yearning youthful freedom except -
Ideologies clash, bestowed markings of past unhealed through varnish.

An abstract landscape, filled with an open mind and instinctive garnish,

Potential portrait, self worth, and focus where inner love would harness,

Peak potential, teachings of achievements meant fighting regardless,

A sneak peek, showing strokes of persona behind her fortress,

Rough composition, a lost gallery's saga demonstrated harmless,

Stout premonitions, a realist's true colours - posted fate.

Honest confession? Brushed masterpiece sent from the heaven's gate.

Realism dotted pointillism's art, a boundless... soulful palette awaits,

A moralistic mural, frugal expressionism in her craft without debate,

Cubism's jural, dual piece's estate - innates anxiety's weight,

Curated close to the expression slating a new start.

Red and white paint, the sky, and a pulse... of visual hearts."

abstract dirge
# sinful lodge I've been inspired by this Discord Channel.. this one's for you guys Watch the ...

I LOVE the grapphic it opens with by the way - great job utilizing your accent a bit - this would kill in the states I feel. I also enjoy the unique inflection sometimes, I feel I'm learning how to spice up my more happy and esoteric narrations ❤️

I feel you do a FANTASTIC job focusing on certain words, like 'potential portrait' for example. Great timing on some of the end rhymes by the way ❤️ feels organic but tight. I love this line in particular, "Realism dotted pointillism's art, a boundless... soulful palette awaits,".

Great showmanship on the ending! This mix felt a bit more natural but I also enjoy how the mix gets loud enough to enjoy the music as well. Great job! ❤️

sinful lodge
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Always a pleasure getting feedback from you @abstract dirge truly motivating and it helps to keep it going. I'm glad you noticed the accent there, Jamaican "Proper" English