nocturne shell
-First glance-
I looked at you from afar
Your eyes as dark as the abyss pulled me in a crowd of thousands.
You were only a meter away but already in my heart
I gazed into your eyes frozen, not leaving a second to spare
You moved as fast as the wind without looking at me
crossed me like it was nothing I felt
Like the autumn who after left me to the cold
Alas, No matter how good the season it must move on.
This is my first poem guys, I need some reviews and tips to improve
nocturne shell
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nocturne shell
Write more. You're pretty good @nocturne shell
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Write more. You're pretty good <@456226577798135808>
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nocturne shell
Write more. You're pretty good <@456226577798135808>
Thank you!
is there any mistake or tip you have for me?
nocturne shell
Ill try my best! thank you
I thought as it was my first poem, I should stick with free-verse
Now I can experiment
wind void
This is my first poem guys, I need some reviews and tips to improve
THATS SO GOOD WTF
GET A PUBLISHER
IM INVIESTING IN U BBG
U R REALLY THE REAL DEALL
nocturne shell
haha, thank youu, I really appreciate it.
wide yokeBOT
haha, thank youu, I really appreciate it.
Wonderful! @nocturne shell has just pregressed to level 1!
floral radish
I'm really impressed.
I actually have no words.
I wonder if you mind checking out my first poem as well (which is also free-verse)
nocturne shell
I actually have no words.
thank youu
nocturne shell
I wonder if you mind checking out my first poem as well (which is also free-vers...
Yeh sure, can u send me the link?