#the truth

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rare lagoon
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we learn from our own mistakes
so that we can develop the strength
to give a place to the pain and sorrow
that we carry

this way we can understand and let go
of the things that will haunt us all our lives
so that we learn from the pain
and the mistakes that we have made

we believe that things happen for a reason
that people change
so that we can learn to let go
that things go wrong
so that we are grateful when they go right

we believe lies for example
and learn to trust only in ourselves
that good things fall apart
so that something better eventually
takes its place

we gain the power to look
into other people's feelings
and understand them
that when someone is sad
we know what to say or what to do
to make that person feel better

we can love someone
and after a while not love
that person anymore
that when we say to that person
“I will always be there for you”
we do not actually mean it
but say it out of joy and love

we can stay angry for a very long time
after an argument
and ignore that person for a long time
or not even talk to them
we can even remove that person from our lives

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stoic patrol
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I suppose you have gone for freestyle and a prose structure.

stoic patrol
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In my opinion, the name doesn't reflect the actual meaning of the poem and is out of context. But that's just my opinion.

last notch
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KIller! Keep it up! ❤️

rare lagoon
stoic patrol
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This poem gives out something that is a universal truth which every person can relate with
So we can use a name that caters to that aspect

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As of now, the best I can think of is "Reality of life"

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I am sorry lol

rare lagoon
last notch
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people's tastes differ

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I strongly prefer a wide variety but I want most is something special and authentic! your voice is good and diverse I feel

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I'd keep in mind if I were you to focus on your strengths and how you can best evoke them!

rare lagoon
last notch
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ANd so far I think you have some great diversity but I feel like my favorites is 'candles' personally!

last notch
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the content can show the meaning SUPER well in this poem

stoic patrol
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I feel you can title this one ANY way and the message will slam with all the force of a hurricane galeforce wind that just got dumped

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I like using the titles as easter eggs or references to the inspiration - that can be fun

rare lagoon
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the truth

last notch
# rare lagoon i see yes! good advice thzank u

anytime! some of the titles of some published stuff I just read was salient like 'The writer's life' then others were 'the shaman figurine car ornament explains the accident, then naps'

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(from Joahnna fuhrman's pagaent)

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poetry is INCREDIBLY diverse, feel free to trust your gut and get weird imo!

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THOUGH: I do like the idea of having a purposeful title as a hint if the content is a bit mysterious

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I do that sometimes

rare lagoon
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rare lagoon
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this is silly example but I'm doing a terraria series of poems and their titles will be 'Alone with the hot zoologist and a full moon' - which will probably confuse and/or dissapoint a lot of people because she won't come up THATTTTT often

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(often enough though, that character is hilarious - valley girl werewolves go! great game too)

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one title idea I like for this one by the way

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is 'we learn'

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then if you mess with the form a little bit like this maybe

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we get some further enjambment and isolate the title a bit for effect

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"

we learn
from our own mistakes
so that we can
develop the strength
to give a place
to the pain and sorrow that we carry. "

  • done by syllables of 2, 5, 4, 5, 4, 10 (you could split sorrow, some folks split words to use in justified texts or certain forms)
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Or: "

we learn

from
our own mistakes
so that we can develop
the strength
to give a place
to the pain and sorrow
that we carry"

this one is just based off the lines themselves

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really type setting wise though you should have about full freedom

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some people go nuts with it but a lot of folks eschew it - I go back and forth depending how much i hate myself that day

rare lagoon
last notch
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I find sad poetry really valuable, but sad poetry with messages that help us cherish what we have? I find that priceless ❤️