#Song of Seasons

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fringe iris
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Remember me not
in the shades of autumn;
think of me not
in the whites of winter.

But rather,
when all my summer days
are gone, think of me,
instead, as Spring.

Clothe me in the raiment
of new flowers and fresh rain,
of budding trees and
fertile earth.

Imagine me with the
new-born sun,
covered in a garland
of returned stars renewed.

Remember me not
in the shades of autumn;
think of me not
in the whites of winter.

But rather,
when all my summer days
are gone, think of me,
instead, as Spring.

hardy summitBOT
spark solar
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the repetition on the spring line is very impactful. i love this piece. i love nature themed poems, very beautiful!

fringe iris
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rancid carbon
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woooooo always love to read a good nature poem

spark solar
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This is beautiful. Love reading nature poems.

quaint raven
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a bit empty

fringe iris
# quaint raven a bit empty

Elaborate, please. It would be helpful to hear where/what/how it comes across to you as "too empty". Is there a specific line, or rhythm/meter, or poetic conceit, or figurative language, or syntax/diction choice...?

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Simply saying "a bit empty" isn't useful or productive feedback.

fringe iris
fringe iris