wheat apex
I cant think therefore I’m not
Unique enough to express my thoughts
What is time but a series of moments
Which sting like a poison that’s potent
If I plant my feet, please water the tree
Fuel my ideas, but for a cost, it ain’t free
Have you ever sat and just wondered alone?
The sounds I hear make such a pretty tone
Write, sleep, wake up and regret the pen
Why should I cry the world will always spin
Self corruption and will keep the feelings within
If God knows all, why do we still sin?
wheat apex
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abstract ravine
a bit depressing
digital hazel
excellent writing. the last line is very powerful. the “pen” and “spin” lines are giving me some trouble. otherwise very solid work! love what you have to say. love the first line of the second stanza
digital hazel
a bit depressing
Stop being so mean your boring ahh coments are everywhere. Stop making poets feel uncomfortable.
neat raptorBOT
Stop being so mean your boring ahh coments are everywhere. Stop making poets fee...
Wonderful! @digital hazel has just pregressed to level 2!
digital hazel
If ur jealous that this person can write better than u then leave the server hun! 😊
untold viper
I love it , this is deep , what i feeling for days. It has a nice flow even if it looks it doesn't after i read it a few times it seems amazing to me . Nice , It is tellings a lot of things like about time and of its importance , . I find the 2nd Stanza the most complex to understand and i'm not sure if i got it right. "If i plant my feet, please water the tree"does that mean that the person is asking people to not take notice of them ?, "fuel my ideas , but for a cost, it ain't free" like i take that as your asking a reason to be alive .
or something else entirely .
abstract ravine
Stop being so mean your boring ahh coments are everywhere. Stop making poets fee...
goed poetry always come with a price... b*tch
abstract ravine
nope
digital hazel
Disrespectful
viscid quartz
What about instead of saying “that’s potent” you said “so potent”? You used punctuation in some places but not others so it’s hard to tell if it was really intentional use and refrain or if it was cause you just didn’t in some spots. Enjoyed reading your piece👍
wheat apex
goed poetry always come with a price... b*tch
Lol
wheat apex
What about instead of saying “that’s potent” you said “so potent”? You used punc...
Ahhh i see whatcha mean. Yeah that would probably flow a bit better. Thanks for the criticism :)