Sunflowers

[terse blade]

Any comments/feedback is greatly appreciated as I am just getting back into writing

I mainly did product descriptions for a website as it payed well, but since I no longer do that, I’ve been trying other forms of writing

And for anyone wondering, this poem is inspired by a girl I’ve liked for ages but never told her directly

[terse blade]

<@&1145760802666717234> I’d to get some feedback

[wanton yew]

Yes.

[grim thunder]

I can feel the admiration through the screen! There’s a couple of typos I think, unless they were intentional ofc (ex: “Feelings are like sunflowers, they stare the sun,” should be, “Feelings are like sunflowers, they stare at the sun), but I really liked this!

Honestly comparing the subject of the poem to the sun just immediately showcases a level of devotion, which came across really well.

[terse blade]

How did I not realize that 😭

I’m so dumb

And thank you

I was hoping to get across the fact that I like her

[grim thunder]

It happens to the best of us 😂

[grim thunder]

You def got that across!

[terse blade]

Good

[civic summit]

this is really pretty! loved the metaphors and imagery

[terse blade]

Thx!