help with my favorite unfinished poem

[violet stag]

(iii) maybe a realization of creation, and understand of what we are and and the creation of “I”

Loving the alliterations (: don’t break your flow too often tho

[analog comet]

thanks! what do you mean with breaking my flow?

[tardy cobalt]

if I had to guess, I think they're saying some of words are slowing down the pace of the poem? like the phrase 'colourful collision of comprehensive, complex and cathartic light' reads a lot slower than the other lines. Overall i like it, very existential and almost nihilistic. I would add something at the end to round it out all out. ie perhaps something about embracing the absurdity of this life to the fullest?

or you could end it in the opposite, where you make something of a statement about how ephemeral this life we have is?