first time writing poetry!! feedback appreciated :)

[soft atlas]

i wrote some haikus for the first time ever!! feedback would be appreciated, thanks! (btw, they are all seperate) <@&968253730841567284>

[glossy crystal]

If you enjoyed writing the haikus, Can I suggest that you look into a longer form japanese style called choka.

[storm bay]

Haiku 5, doesn't really tell us anything, or paint much of a scene. Haiku 6 the echo of the word 'world' i feel takes away from what it is trying to say. Maybe, change that first line? Completely.

shunned by others
The walk by, glance, and whisper
alone against the world

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Also feel free to abandon the 5-7-5 syllable count for the Haiku, that is originally a japanese sounds thing but doesn't translate perfectly to english and can end up being restricting on what you want to say

If this is your first time writing poetry them I am very impressed. Keep up the good work and hope you enjoy it!

[vagrant schooner]

I love it but you lose direction keep a steady message but hide its meaning so its discovery is like that of a truffle hard found but deeply loved.

[glossy crystal]

good advice