Once, I was seven years old

[sharp meteor]

When I felt sad, I went to the verge of the town
To see the lonely light of the telephone pole
For a seven year old me, it was amazing.
When I stared upon it with my tear rolling eyes
The fragments of a rainbow were glittering bright.
As i travelled home, all things changed shape as i blinked.
It was just like dreaming alone, in the Twilight.
I kept on standing there until I was reproached.

Ahh, why do I have to grow up?
When am I going to grow up?

[fathom blade]

I like this idea of contrast which is quite evident throughout the whole poem, but I especially like the usage in the final couplet. It clearly shows how the person has changed as they've grown.

The innocence of the young person is also reflected by the entire awe they go through when looking at this lamp post, and the entire idea of like seeing rainbows from the refracted light on the tears; I love it. Especially because it links into that idea of innocence and childhood, which is gone as they grow. The child wants to grow but now they are an adult and understand the world, they are no longer in awe and regret growing up. They want that same innocence and awe experience that they had as a child.

Great poem!!

[sharp meteor]

Hey there! Wow, I just read your poem, and I have to say, it's truly amazing! I love how you captured those heartfelt emotions and took us on a journey down memory lane. The way you described the lonely light of the telephone pole and the fragments of the rainbow glittering bright was so vivid and beautiful! And that part about being seven years old, it really tugged at my heartstrings. It's like I could feel the innocence and vulnerability in your words. You've got this unique way of blending sadness with wonder, and it makes the poem so captivating. And can I just say, the dreamlike atmosphere you created when you talked about "dreaming alone in the Twilight" was absolutely magical! I felt like I was right there with you, experiencing that surreal moment. Oh, and the ending, where you question why you have to grow up, it's like you're longing for that carefree time of childhood and feeling a bit unsure about what the future holds. It's so relatable!You're doing great! 😊✨
But, I also gotta say few things:
Consider adding a bit more descriptive language or imagery to enhance the reader's connection with your emotions and the scene. You could use sensory details like the smell of the air, the sound of your surroundings, or the feeling of the tears rolling down your cheeks to create a more vivid experience. The line "Ahh, why do I have to grow up?" conveys a strong emotion, but it might be even more impactful if you delve deeper into the feelings of nostalgia and the fear of leaving behind childhood innocence. You could explore these emotions further to give the reader a more profound glimpse into your mindset.

[sharp meteor]

Thanks @fathom blade , it means a lot ❤️

[sharp meteor]

Thanks for your kind words and feedback @sharp meteor , will work on that ❤️🙏

[sharp meteor]

😁

[warped arrow]

This one is great! As a suggestion perhaps put a comma after the word “alone” so as to draw emphasis on being solitary.