toxic goblet
In the depths of despair, a soul weeps,
Shattered dreams, where sorrow seeps.
A somber melody plays in the air,
A symphony of heartache, beyond repair.
Hopeless whispers echo through the night,
As darkness swallows the last glimmer of light.
A broken spirit, with wounds unseen,
Lost in a labyrinth, where pain convenes.
on the edge, a dying light,
wishing death on this dreadful life.
i stand here, in the middle of the night,
she was the perfect wife, but she chose the knife.
autumn bane
Oooohh! It’s interesting!
proven yoke
The ending line hits hard!
I love setting the scene to have a somber melody, but then revealing it to be the sound of heartache!
narrow pumice
Interesting indeed good line, maybe more appropriate for sensitive poetry channel but very good
autumn bane
I’m not personally a massive fan of the same rhyme constantly, but I think it’s quite nice here! The ending is definitely different to the overall rhythm of the poem, but again I like that!
toxic goblet
i tried to make the last stanza disorganised to illustrate lack of motivation
toxic goblet
thats why the rhyme scheme also changes
proven yoke
Fascinating! I see it now, especially since the beginning of the poem has such a strong rhythm!
Good job! ^*^
toxic goblet
narrow pumice
You should be proud
toxic goblet
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proven yoke
Alrighty right! Who's next!
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I will pin this in my notes for later >:D
toxic goblet
I will pin this in my notes for later >:D
toxic goblet
Heartache.