#Icarus

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sonic jolt
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SO good

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love the flow

signal matrix
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Awww thank you!

sonic jolt
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is this from the viewpoint of daedalus?

signal matrix
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No clue who that is! But I assume it was someone close to Icarus in the story!

sonic jolt
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daedalus: icarus' father; he created his wings and told him not to fly too high; he saw his son fall into the aegean and drown

signal matrix
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Oh my!

versed charm
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Rough :c

signal matrix
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That sounds like it would be a wonderful speaker for the poem!

sonic jolt
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that was my immediate thought reading this

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like a father mourning their child

versed charm
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Oddly enough, the imagery I developed in my head was due to two lines and is no way your intention lol

signal matrix
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Oh?

sonic jolt
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do tell

lucid gazelle
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my greek mythology obsessed self is screaming at this

versed charm
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Did you make it through?
Did you make it home okay?

And the imagery of a modern day Icurus, I mean, I'm not a negative person, but I thought of drunk driving

sonic jolt
signal matrix
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Woah, that's a pretty interesting interpretation! But it totally works and I can see where you're coming from!

signal matrix
sonic jolt
lucid gazelle
sonic jolt
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linked commment

lucid gazelle
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ooh it definitely is

signal matrix
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Confirmed

sonic jolt
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also with the greeks' obsession with turning people into stars the comparison works really well

lucid gazelle
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but i think it's a metaphor for all parents who are scared for their children, especially ones with troubled children

signal matrix
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That's a very interesting interpretation too!

sonic jolt
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I honestly just see it as a mourning poem

lucid gazelle
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also the second verse really reminded me of a parent looking back at the last conversation with their child before they commit suicide, idk why

round osprey
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Apologies I’m here now! I love the irregular rhythmic scheme! I also love how you use Icarus as a way to reference the loss of the speakers partner. The imagery is lovely and lively!

lucid gazelle
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before their child commits suicide not them

signal matrix
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As a writer, I despise leaving poems open-ended and up for interpretation, but I think this one is different! I love it!

sonic jolt
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that said, do you have an intended meaning?

signal matrix
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I do!

round osprey
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Ooo please share!

signal matrix
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My interpretation of this poem is me looking back on my old self, who had insanely high expectations, and because of them I ended up hurting myself pretty badly!

lucid gazelle
signal matrix
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That's why I think this poem works so well as an open interpretation poem!

round osprey
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I’m sorry about that, but that’s a lovely way to think of the poem!

Hearing that, I almost see it in the opposite way. Of a younger version of the speaker looking to the future and wondering what they have done with themself

sonic jolt
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that actually still works in the context of the daedalus comparison: The father (greater/truer self) seeing his child (the socially constructed self) crash and burn as they fly too close to the sun

signal matrix
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Alrighty, who's next?

sonic jolt
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I am like a rat desperately sniffing for mythonology comparisons im sorry

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I can share mine

signal matrix
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No worries haha!

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Go for it! Take your wings and soar!

sonic jolt
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^this one is kinda retreading on some ideas I've already written about but I wanted to take it from another perspective

signal matrix
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Your flow is definitely a strong suit.

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and the imagery is stellar!

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This is my favorite one! But all of them are really good!

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Thank you! Usually that's thanks to meter, but I was less strong on my meter here.

signal matrix
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That twinkling sky
Of blackish hue,
that daytime ceiling forged of blue-

Literally euphoric sounding

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Awww I'm flattered! ^*^

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Also spoiler alert, Icarus did not make it home Ok.

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TwT

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Poor guy

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