<@&1116088175618699345> I would like your thoughts upon this one.
#My Darling One
molten chasm
rare bone
It's good but I much prefer poems about cheating
wise swallow
I like the last line. The swallow stone line is not good. The whole poem overall I feel is just ok but idk how to tell you to make it better. Its a bit too straightforward I think
molten chasm
It's good but I much prefer poems about cheating
Thanks! I could write one.
molten chasm
I like the last line. The swallow stone line is not good. The whole poem overall...
Ok. I will see into that. Thanks for your support.
compact nest
Mystical.
thorn juniper
clever ridge
<@&1116088175618699345> I would like your thoughts upon this one.
love how everything is portrayed
molten chasm
love how everything is portrayed
Thank you! I appreciate it.
molten chasm
it's pretty simple, but it is still so beautiful and I really like it!
Thanks for your lovely words!
frigid crater
yeah, there's a certain elegance to the simple things in life
why, of course, there's a certain elegance to the complexity in life as well
molten chasm
That's true.
ashen copper
Your heartfelt poem is a beautiful expression of love and devotion. While it captures the emotions and sentiments admirably, there's always room for improvement to make it even more captivating. But still the emotions are conveyed in a beautiful sense 🤍 .. it's beautiful.
river breach
I just got the exact same experience with the guy I like... So I love the poem...
And I love the pov of yu
molten chasm
Thank you @orchid flume ! I'm glad you liked it.
wary sparrow
thats really well written, captures true emotions.