terse nacelle Jul 2, 2023, 9:00 AM

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Is that why we are blind? Can we feel?
Can we see? Why am I questioning, as I climb with my heel?
Why mustn't I submit to lineage succumb? - my fingers peel.

The tar is hot, it takes me away, with scrap
Of flesh, left painted across the blackened
Metal-bars of the ladder. Stuck in this heated trap:
Descending lineage how must it feel to never-end?

Descending lineage, counting down the ages,
Must I look down and admire your stories and pages?

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terse nacelle Jul 2, 2023, 9:01 AM

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@serene depot (here)

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Guys feedback is appreciated ❤️ 🙂

terse nacelle Jul 2, 2023, 9:28 AM

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https://tenor.com/view/hug-gif-26312675

Tenor

slender rose Jul 2, 2023, 9:29 AM

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I don't really feel anything from it.

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I am not saying it is in poor quality, I am saying that I genuinely just don't feel anything from it.

slender rose Jul 2, 2023, 9:31 AM

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terse nacelle https://tenor.com/view/hug-gif-26312675

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solid lynx Jul 2, 2023, 9:48 AM

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It's not very good

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I really dont like the length of the poem or the language used

terse nacelle Jul 2, 2023, 1:40 PM

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oh ok

brazen hornet Jul 3, 2023, 1:27 AM

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terse nacelle > Is that why we are blind? Can we feel? Can we see? Why am I questioning, as I ...

I really like this! your language gives it that additional nice touch

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I also really like the concept

terse nacelle Jul 3, 2023, 5:59 AM

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Thanks

terse nacelle Jul 5, 2023, 6:58 PM

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pepeYes

austere geyser Jul 7, 2023, 4:01 PM

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Your poem is fantastic! I feel every verse; it’s like time line describing the evolution of the lineage throughout the history of mankind. It’s deep and beautiful. sparkles

#Calling out the ages:

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