some advice for ethnographic poems.

[hollow turret]

In terms of clarity of intent, it is clear that you aim to personify the hut as a spectral presence burdened by its closure and its remote location. The poem effectively explores the hut's isolation, its inability to join a sewage plan, and the difficulty of maintenance work due to its inaccessibility. Additionally, you touch upon the looming threat of climate change and its potential impact on Ruahapu's ski slopes, further highlighting the hut's significance within the community and its shared identity.

To enhance the clarity and flow of the poem, you may consider refining certain phrases and expanding on certain ideas. For example, in the line "How did you climb so high, overburdened?", it might be helpful to provide some specific imagery or details to illustrate the burden the hut carries. Similarly, when discussing the hut's loneliness and seclusion, you could delve deeper into its history and the reasons behind its current state.

[hearty plank]

How's something like:
How did you climb so high?
Overburdened by time.
Felt on the spine, you exude pressure.

Do you think expanding on its history would require another stanza or would it be more appropriate within the existing structure?

I like the flow from high to time to spine but am unsure about it's place in the wider structure.

Also thank you so much for the great advice.

[hollow turret]

I'm happy you liked the advice! Your new lines flow nicely, going from "high" to "time" to "spine." It adds a weighty feel to the poem. As for expanding on the hut's history, you can totally do it within the current structure. It depends on how deep you wanna go. If you think diving into its history would make the poem better and give more context, adding another stanza could work. It lets you explore the past and what led to its current state. But if you wanna focus on the present emotions of the hut's closure, stick with the existing structure. It's your poem, so trust your gut and do what feels right