cherry lips | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

zenith dagger Jun 14, 2023, 5:23 AM

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<@&1116088175618699345> anyone like

slender raft Jun 14, 2023, 5:24 AM

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this is good! if you wanted you could play around with line breaks, so like between "heart." and "does" it would have an extra

thing like this. but still really good and i love the perspective!
also if you took different sized breaks, if its a line longer, it can make the reader take a second and reflect on what they just read
word-wise tho, astounding work!

ruby matrix Jun 14, 2023, 5:25 AM

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It's good but I think maybe you could change some of the line breaks if you wanted?

slender raft Jun 14, 2023, 5:27 AM

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ruby matrix It's good but I think maybe you could change some of the line breaks if you want...

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zenith dagger Jun 14, 2023, 5:28 AM

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i kinda like it without the line breaks

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but

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it works

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