i can tell youve put a lot of effort into this great poem
#she's not like the other girls
fallow kiln
i think it could do with a strong 5th stanza
it does have to be between 2 and 3 mins so i probably could add another stanza
fallow kiln
short, sharp, a strong message
yeah im gonna repost this when ive like perfected it. i'll tag u when its finished again :)
chilly pollen
@fallow kiln i think you could go really deep in the 5th stanza
finish with a rhetorical question
rancid shale
What happened to this 😔 I wanted to see how this would look like because of the pick me name hahahah
fallow kiln
What happened to this 😔 I wanted to see how this would look like because of the...
#1112608177557618700 i had some final edits to do so this is the final version of this poem :)
drowsy geyser
It was deleted
fallow kiln
u may not be able to see the pictures. are u on pc?
drowsy geyser
No, mobile
fallow kiln
ive taken screen shots of the entire poem and put it in because its to long for me to send. u may not be able to see them because of the device ur using idk its weird. try scrolling all the way to the top
rancid shale
I can only see that it's deleted sadly
fallow kiln
#1112608177557618700 hm cuz on my screen its not but i can probably repost another version for people who cant view the screenshots
fallow kiln
I can only see that it's deleted sadly
ok so here is the other version. hopefully u can view it now #1112887108101742744
fallow kiln
@rancid shale and @drowsy geyser :)
worthy orchid