Worse

[sonic iron]

I'm thinking about switching the last two stanzas, but that throws off the repetition. Anyone have ideas?

[supple gale]

i would change

"I don’t have control
Over my actions

I don’t have control
Over my feelings"

to

"I don’t have control
Over my feelings

I don’t have control
Over yours"

its small but i think its a little more interesting and usually when im experiencing sensory overload a big part of whats going on in my head is worrying about how im possibly bothering others

[sonic iron]

That sounds nice! Thank you!

[supple gale]

i would also change "please dont yell at me, its just getting worse" to "please dont yell at me, you're making it worse. then remove "each emotion bests me, its just getting worse" i dont think its a bad line but i think getting rid of it would help the rest flow better

[sonic iron]

That sound a lot better! Thats an awesome tip!!