need honest poem critique 🙏 ppl said it was too boring and wordy

[compact onyx]

@bitter tide @quick moss hey fellow ocean vuong telemachus readers please work your magic

also it’s based on this photo

[polar fossil]

is that a whole sea turtle?

[quick moss]

i have been summoned

you look familiar - were you previously n?

also the turtle - love that 🙏

[quick moss]

im super busy these few weeks so feel ree to ping me again in june 🙏

[compact onyx]

yup hi jesse

[compact onyx]

yes but apparently with the structure, it’s too hard to read and the people critiquing suggested I change it 😭 thoughts?

[polar fossil]

Tbh It wasn't that hard for me to read, and yk I'm low-key slow ash but I think you should keep it this way

[quick moss]

oh!

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