#Broken Rhythm

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grizzled terrace
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Broken Rhythm

Ticking like a wick in a candlestick,
She plows the snow in a driveway-go,
Sailing pale and frail in whirling hail,
She wails by the stale woods bound by nails,
She unrests in broken rhythm.

Knew only a few with the whole wide view,
Too much, she couldn’t do in days of rue,
She shivers and quivers, and gazes at the mirror,
Sink her feelings, by the brink of what she’d think,
She crumbles in broken rhythm.

The story was such and I couldn’t do much,
Those icy cold waters I couldn’t touch.
Rich was her stitch in this relentless sitch,
Impressed me did her caress, in a mess no less.
Wrought stress like a tight dress’s tight press.
She went on,
In broken rhythm.
||PS:3||

maiden lava
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I am obsessed with the rhyme scheme and the constant reference to cold/winter. Also the repetition of “broken rhythm” is offputting but in a good way that feels intentional. Is this a poem about pushing through struggles? English is my first language but sometimes I still have trouble understanding it

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maiden lava
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Oh Im so sorry to hear that, one if my friends left discord a few years ago with a weird apology and I never heard from her again.. it sucks

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wraith inlet
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I love the rhythm and the 3rd stanza I am kinda stuck with it, I like those thoughts and words from the dusty corners of your mind. I just love the 3rd stanza.

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@grizzled terrace

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wraith inlet
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hehe okk I would love see other works of yours

grizzled terrace
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also i'm gonna go find another one of your poems

wraith inlet
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these are the only two poems I published so you may not find it/

glacial coralBOT
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*these are the only

two poems I published so

you may not find it/*

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wraith inlet
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I am new to this

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vale whale
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@vale whale rawr

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