#The Perfect Man

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hexed creek
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I'm not clean, and I'm not worthy
You are perfect, You are Godly
You have come here, to let us know you
But all we have done, is control You

I'm not like them, I will never
I will follow You forever
You're the basin of truth and light
We are sinful, we are not right

I hope you forgive us, for we have sinned
We are not worthy of your basin
If they continue to lie and blaspheme
I will step in, and let your beauty be seen

If there is bad english I'm sorry, it's not my first language. Btw enjoy my first poem ever!

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Feel free to advise me on poetry

sullen vigil
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i love it so much but the last part doesnt rhyme at all i would replace sinned with commited a sin so basin and sin can rhyme

hexed creek
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On the last two m and n are both nasal consonants so it's close to rhyming. I would suggest "to see your beauty gleam."

hexed creek
hexed creek