we are there one minute
on the beach
swimming like there was no tomorrow
then I blink
it all fades
now we are at sea
I can feel the waves under the boat
I look around
I don't want to blink
I fear the feeling the of calm fading
almost vanishing
but I have to blink
and when I open my eyes we are in the woods
running
as if we were running towards something
I can see you
you are running next to me
it gives me a feeling
almost like a feeling of safety
but I run out of breath
I have to stop
take a breath
but you don't stop
you are gone before I know it
and you are taking this feeling from me
so I start running again
I can almost see you
but then it all stops
it all fades
then I open my eyes
but this time I don't see you
I don't feel the cool wood breeze
I don't feel the waves of the sea
all I feel are the blankets on my bed
and the dream slowly fading
and I know that in a minutes time
the dream will be gone JM
#Dreams
little ridge
vernal folio
This poem is so beautiful 🥰✨ The emotion are raw and real and I can feel what you’re trying to portray. Amazing writing and a skilled author❤️
split summit
i love the pacing of this poem
little ridge
thank you so much
little ridge
i want to turn some of my poems into songs but i am not very good at instruments does anyone have any tips on how i could do that
split summit
learn some basic theory but w the uprising of pop music and technology u don’t need to have a HUGE understanding to create boppy music
i suggest yt tutorials 
little ridge
ok thanks
vernal folio
your comment has made my day
I am glad !! Continue with amazing work🥰
vernal folio
i want to turn some of my poems into songs but i am not very good at instruments...
Well music theory is what you need. You need to know about appropriate chord progressions, both major and minor scales, some rules when it comes to music composition. After u learnt that and trust me it isnt as difficult as it sounds u will be able to make music. If u have any qs on anything ab music dm me, i privately teach piano and theory so i can help out🫶🏻
vernal folio
Hahah u can and dont have to im just putting it out there so yk
little ridge
thank you
tardy karma
one issue I have with this poem is that the lines seem to be enjambed (line break) like text messages would be
tardy karma
there’s no other logic besides clauses
there’s also little value in reading it more than once - because you don’t seem to do too much with the sounds of the words
the sounds of words are as much a part of, if not more important than, the actual content of a poem
no one ever seems to realize that
but, if you look at any good poem, you see that
little ridge
So you think it would be better if the words rhymed a bit
little ridge
Oh I see
tardy karma
and then maybe considered adding a little rhyme, if you’re feeling brave and verbally dexterous
do you know how meter works?
little ridge
Not necessarily, but I could figure it out
tardy karma
okay
here
take iambic pentameter
example line:
“if music be the food of love, play on”
read it out loud
notice how it seems to have a rhythm
something like
“if MUsic BE the FOOD of LOVE play ON”
right?
little ridge
Yeah
tardy karma
notice that pattern
little ridge
Mhm
little ridge
I should have listened more to the music teacher
Ok
tardy karma
it’s something you’d learn more in english class
not music class
english is musical
musical language
little ridge
She does both so it carries over
little ridge
Ok thanks for the advice I will see if I can apply it to a few of my other poems
tardy karma
every single shakespeare sonnet, milton sonnet, all of paradise lost, etc etc etc etc, is written with that meter
good luck
use meter! and read your stuff out loud
makes for better poetry
little ridge
every single shakespeare sonnet, milton sonnet, all of paradise lost, etc etc et...
Hmm I’ll have to check some of them out
tardy karma
there are 154 shakespeare sonnets
uh
favorite milton sonnet is
“when I consider how my light is spent”
little ridge
I’ll have to check it out