thorn scaffold
I love you love you, I love you more than anything,
Naïve as a canvas of the Rousseau,
Your kisses are so sweet,
I love you love you, I love you more than anything,
The love that we will never make together,
And the most beautiful, the most violent-
The purest, the most intoxicating,
My flesh and my blood 🩸
warm lagoon
I love you my love
Mon amour
Dors
dans mes bras
viens entre mes reins
10/10 tu es la vague, moi l’île nue
compact marlin
hello could you please speak in english
so that other english-speaking members will understand what you're communicating?
warm lagoon
hello could you please speak in english
so that other english-speaking members w...
i am si si sorry i no speak langue anglaise very ok
thorn scaffold
hello could you please speak in english
so that other english-speaking members w...
He said that
I am his love
And his thirst
And I am in his arms
warm lagoon
le français is the langue i say
thorn scaffold
And wants me between his loins
And he said that I am the wave crashing upon his beach
compact marlin
And I am in his arms
i see 👍
compact marlin
i am si si sorry i no speak langue anglaise very ok
it's ok
thorn scaffold
Frères par hasard, amoreux par choix
This means
Brothers by chance, lovers by choice
warm lagoon
@flat linden
My analysis
This poem is a declaration of love that expresses the speaker's deep affection for someone else. The repetition of "I love you" emphasizes the intensity and passion of the speaker's emotions. The phrase "I love you more than anything" emphasizes the magnitude of the speaker's love, suggesting that their affection is all-encompassing.
The simile "Naïve as a canvas of the Rousseau" compares the object of the speaker's love to a painting by Henri Rousseau, an artist known for his vivid and colorful jungle scenes. This comparison suggests that the speaker views their love interest as innocent and unspoiled, perhaps even as a source of natural beauty and wonder.
The line "Your kisses are so sweet" suggests that physical intimacy is an important part of the speaker's relationship with their loved one. This line also reinforces the idea that the speaker's love is all-encompassing, as they seem to appreciate and treasure even the smallest physical expressions of affection.
The phrase "The love that we will never make together" suggests that there are barriers preventing the speaker and their loved one from being together, whether those barriers are external circumstances or internal conflicts. This line adds a sense of longing and bittersweetness to the poem, as the speaker seems to be expressing their love for someone they can never fully have.
The final stanza of the poem uses a series of contrasting adjectives to describe the speaker's love: "the most beautiful, the most violent, the purest, the most intoxicating." These adjectives suggest that the speaker's love is complex and multifaceted, containing elements of both beauty and intensity, purity and intoxication. The final line, "My flesh and my blood," reinforces the idea that the speaker's love is an integral part of their very being, something that is inseparable from their identity. It also emphasizes that they are perhaps family members, probably brothers, especially due to the title of the poem.
flat linden
Originality of concept = 16/25
Use of words = 18/25
Complexity of idea = 12/25
Abstract use of English rules = 15/25
Idea conveyed and captured effectively = 7/10
Total score: 68/100
The poem expresses love in a passionate and intense manner, with a touch of bittersweet sentiment. It makes good use of evocative imagery and employs a mix of simplicity and complexity in its wording. The repetition of "I love you" adds emphasis to the central theme and creates a rhythm that carries the reader through the poem.
However, the poem's ideas could benefit from further development and exploration, as it does not delve deeply into the complexities of love or the emotions that come with it. The use of Henri Rousseau's naïve art as a metaphor for the love presented is interesting but could be better integrated into the poem. Additionally, while the abstract use of English rules is present, it could be more effective in enhancing the poem's overall impact. Overall, the poem effectively captures a passionate and intense love, but it could benefit from a more nuanced exploration of its themes and greater experimentation with language and structure.