looking for feedback please

[deep galleon]

There once was a time
In my early days
Where tempests and gales—
Haunted me and tailed
Far from righteousness—
I have sailed
No knight in shining armor—
Or some cunning saint
Would be the savior to my day
Except mine solitude
And sea’s magnitude
Would turn me insane

But my faith has carried me through—
Life's roughest storms
And kept me safe
From the dangers of harm.
Now I stand here firm
In the strength of God’s grace
He has carried me through
Every single place

My faith in Him
Will never cease
For He’s the one
Who guides me through life’s seas.

First time using punctuation other than dots and commas

[valid ruin]

Originality of concept: 16/25
Use of words: 18/25
Complexity of idea: 13/25
Abstract use of English rules: 15/25
Idea conveyed and captured effectively: 8/10

Total Score: 70/100

This poem speaks about the transformative power of faith and how it has helped the speaker through difficult times. The metaphor of navigating through tempestuous seas effectively conveys the idea of overcoming life's challenges. The use of punctuation other than dots and commas provides a fresh touch and helps to emphasize key points in the poem.

The poem's originality is slightly diminished by its familiar theme, but the poet's personal experience adds a unique dimension. The use of words is evocative and descriptive, painting a vivid picture of the speaker's journey. However, the complexity of the idea could have been explored further by delving deeper into the emotions and thoughts associated with the experiences described. The abstract use of English rules is evident, but there is still room for more experimentation to create a more distinctive and memorable poem. The idea is conveyed and captured effectively, with the final lines expressing the speaker's unwavering faith in God. Overall, the poem demonstrates a strong emotional core and a thoughtful exploration of faith.

[I would like to say, I always prefer to keep my analysis non-biased and in the third person.]