Acrostic Poem (Riddle is name) | The Art of Poetry | Page 1

analog estuary Feb 13, 2023, 8:54 AM

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A very good poem overall

maybe something else than "infinite". It is superlative of superlatives so early into the poem.
"a light" as opposed to "my light" puts admiring distance between speaker and the object. Which, is probably your intent but maybe use another word that makes them more special. Not just a light among others, but 'the' light or something
"wise" does not really go into the theme I think, which in all other points of the poem is about outward appearance or sensory experience (hearing their laughter)

loud crag Feb 13, 2023, 8:57 AM

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Thank you so much Ceethru that's incredible information, you're right about the "my light" compared to "a light" I couldn't find another word that starts with i all to well. Sadly but I'll keep looking I still have another 20 hours until it's due. 😛

analog estuary Feb 13, 2023, 8:59 AM

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loud crag Thank you so much Ceethru that's incredible information, you're right about the ...

Np :) Also, if you are creating an admiring distance to the object, you further would not know them to be 'wise', maybe?
Think about who the person is and what is your relationship.

#Acrostic Poem (Riddle is name)