#THE MIRROR || Poem series(6/6) ||

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IRENNE

She sat besides me, wiping her tears.
In an angelic voice she voiced her fears,
She held my hand and rest it on her cheek,
Her tongue fumbles when she tried to speak.

She kept on looking at that sword on wall,
I went on thinking; why its prominence too small?
Then I looked at my hands, and my wife was crying?
I looked like no warrior, who's ready for dying.

Her deep blue eyes, set me free from my life.
I can't think of anything but Irenne as my wife.
And to be honest I was atleast somewhere true.
This Macedonian warrior, aint someone I knew.

And except for her love, Irenne is a stranger.
The whole Persian vista, triggers my danger.
The mysterious mirror in room is only thing I knew.
And when I looked at it, it finally split in two.

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LILY

When the earth trembled, it broke my sleep.
What I assumed, was a Quintessential leap.
But like everyday, nothing felt familiar,
The past was faded, future wasn't similiar.

That Pikachu totem on the sunlit sill,
It's memories to me, served no Goodwill.
That sliding door and decorative stand,
They filled no purpose, I can't understand.

But that girl, who had just walked in,
She knew all well and how I've been.
Bravery hidden behind a resilient smile,
She held me together,
when we had walked a million miles.

The Princess of her father's kingdom of crimes,
who had sacrificed gold, for a handful of dimes.
Whose stares hold her pain,
and that mirror holds her glee.
But when I looked at it; it'd split in three.

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lusty sage
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Good writings.

ancient topaz
distant whale
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Got better rhyming than most out there.

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That pleases my rhyming soul greatly.

velvet light
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The word choice is immaculate especially Lily.

ionic nacelle
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It flows very well and there’s a lot of feeling behind the words which is very powerful. I think it’s extremely well written. The meaning doesn’t go unnoticed and yet it can be interpreted in the readers own eyes

distant whale
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Aye.

velvet light
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the characters on the images are perhaps the speaker? @ancient topaz

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velvet light
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I see; I'd follow the series.

ancient topaz
velvet light
# ancient topaz Thanks

When's your next release and how do u think the series' poems will be coherent to one-another?

ancient topaz
ancient topaz
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Maybe a day or two.

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It's just an experiment.

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If it works well, I'll try to go even further expand the idea of this story-poem mergers.

velvet light
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holy hell it's written well in love I fell

ancient topaz
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velvet light
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It says 2/6 so is there 4 more?

ancient topaz
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Yeah

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😬 it's too sad I can't pin messages in this Post

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Should i ask the mods to do it?

velvet light
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I'm also new here

ancient topaz
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Oh. Oh welcome welcome friend

velvet light
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thanks, have you been here for a while?

ancient topaz
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Ahm.. last August. But been inactive for months

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velvet light
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Oh I joined like, this week

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Aha.. isee

empty sparrow
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OCTOBER

"This world isn't ours anymore,
it had been dividing, since a nuclear war.
Now that farside hosts those plaster saints,
and dwellers like us, suffer legal restraints."

She quoted all that, filled with roar and rages.
She told her words, as if she knew me for ages.
As no single shadow has left her without scathe
in a world of no gods, I became her only faith.

She took me along with her rebellion brigade,
To a place so hideous, where a discovery was made.
"They say there's, an apparatus up there,
which can peep into past from anywhere."

Her last lines incepted a sense of belonging,
It was time for that answer which I was longing.
But when we had breached the last security line,
There stood a mirror with an existence so benign.

It provoked me to do my introspection,
It invoked in me, a sense of dejection.
It became middling prop of an unending lore,
to trans that forward, has split in four.

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midnight zinc
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# ancient topaz

Still fascinated on how u incorporate AI art to your series to make readers visualize the storyline/characters.

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Trying to make it coherent.

velvet light
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Mhm

velvet light
# ancient topaz Trying to make it coherent.

U did that well with this one, I love that your developing your characters by giving them a voice w/o making it out of place in ur poems and utilize it to take the series to another direction

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velvet light
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ofc.

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velvet light
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No, not at all

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I've also asked the mod to pin the message that can help new readers to navigate through all poems.

livid atlas
# ancient topaz **LILY** When the earth trembled, it broke my sleep. What I assumed, was a Quin...

Oh this reminds me of the mirror by Sylvia Plath , well it indeed is a great poem agreed , and damn the choice of word is just perfect ......it dosent have any flaws
But for the growth part I'd suggest u could maybe add a bit of subtlety to the poem u know like for it to be readable by any person who's not a poet , that way u connect to more PPL who have less knowledge , honestly speaking the poem is like really good that this is the only addition i thought would be good enough to be added to it

ancient topaz
livid atlas
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Oh.. okk...

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There are more to come.

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I needed that feedback to, you know just write them well.

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*A female druid, wild and free,
With hair of gold and eyes that see,
Through ancient forests she would roam,
And call upon the spirits home.

She was a creature of the earth,
With powers beyond what mortals birthed,
She walked with grace, a gentle breeze,
And whispered secrets through the trees.

One day she stood before a pool,
Its waters still, and cool,
And as she gazed into its depths,
She saw a face, a mirror self.

This woman was a mystery,
Her eyes so dark, so deep and free,
Her hair was tangled, wild and wove,
And in her hand, a silver globe.

The druid felt a sudden fear,
For this woman was not what she appeared,
Her eyes held wisdom, old and true,
And whispered secrets, meant for only you.

This woman was a part of her,
A shadow self, both near and far,
The druid understood with ease,
That this was her true inner peace.

So she stood before the mirror self,
And gazed into her soul, so deep and well,
And knew that this was where she belonged,
With this wild woman, in the ancient song.*

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And you could have posted it somewhere else?

harsh wind
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🙌 👏

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severe summit
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Won't it be too confusing?

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You just randomly posted stuff that's not at all connected to the lore..

severe summit
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Maybe but I do love my character lores like DnD

ancient topaz
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Let's keep it as a part of a canon

severe summit
ancient topaz
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That would be nice... Anyone is free to post related poems that can somehow portray the same theme, and then we can add them into sidestories or cannon, great!

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But give ur poem a title

ancient topaz
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😬 atleast post something that's related to the plot.

In this way, you're just creating confusion.

edgy rune
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True, druid one and its change of scenery kind of fit in following the suspenseful end of the text preciding it, but there is no justification why a vampire comes next and why there was no return to the original plot.
His chosen graphics put your AI art to shame though sipsip

ancient topaz
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Mine doesn't demand much details, they need to be simplistic

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Mine are just some women, compared to his mystical creatures.

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It's also good, but it would be better for me if he deletes that from here, or either post it as a different poem.

ancient topaz
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Sorry but I will ask them for taking (only from this post) because it doesn't makes any sense bro....

severe summit
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empty sparrow
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VEDIKA

Burdened with questions that still stand,
I opened my eyes, amidst a tropical land.
This time I was equipped with a little of senses,
That mirror responsible for all consequences.

Atleast I knew what was going around me,
I was living in a country that just became free.
I looked at my front wall, lit with sunshine,
A calender was hung, dated 9-5-1959.

But some feet away, in a room just upstairs,
I heard a woman singing her morning prayers,
Like all the lives i had, there was a familiarity,
She may be the part of my alternate reality.

I found my room filled with priceless awards,
I maybe a scientist looking for ancient records.
While my curiosity started burning like fire,
My wife came in, wearing an Indian attire.

Her anklets chimed, as she walked towards me,
She served with her hands, that sweet Indian tea.
She showed her love in the most unfamiliar way.
Her affectionate smile, was really subtle to say.

Distracted from her something caught my eye,
In my hall way, that mirror stood high,
playing a game of chess, with my desires to survive,
But it gave me no chance, and got split in five.

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midnight zinc
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ancient topaz
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Basic storyline, so needed to do smth to overcome the repetition

midnight zinc
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Good work.

ancient topaz
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People'who just showed up, can check the pinned comments for the track of series....

rare gulch
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you're a pretty good writer :)

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stable marten
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omg, this is so unique, my brain is too small to comprehend whats going but its still cool nevertheless. I kinda want to try something like this out now...

ancient topaz
severe summit
velvet light
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Nice

ancient topaz
velvet light
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Wonderful poems, and also the great idea to present them

ancient topaz
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Sorry for the delay, for those who are following the series, the 5th part will be dropping tomorrow. ☔

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And those who just landed here, can check the pinned comments to follow the series and show their support

edgy rune
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Good, was about to riot

The latest part is good. It has solidified the pattern as alternate reality/time travel, instead of just being confusing, to me.
"showed her love in the most unfamiliar way" is a very nice line
"anklets chimed" is a nice for the senses

Grammar correction here: "Atleast I knew what was going on around me". There might be some other ones but I dont rmbr rn.

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It was posted 3 days ago

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Evelyn

I've lived several lives, tripping over illusion.
I've seen changing nights, mirroring my delusion.
My leaps through time, have uttered no clearance,
My poem has no rhymes rather an uncluttered coherence.

I travelled from East to West side of the Earth,
In a blink of an eye, I just got rebirth.
I found myself in a room lit with taper lights.
As head of the house, which suffered several plights.

Those walls hadn't been painted for years,
Every month-end awaits, a family filled with tears.
I looked for my half, that shares my despair,
To hold me together, was she really there?

But before I got up and then tried to find,
I felt her gentle touch and a hug from behind.
Even in the time of misery, when the devil's in.
She was standing behind me, she was my Evelyn.

"They stole your works, and crushed your fame,
And since after then, the life hasn't been same.
But I really am here to hold you together,
In these tough times, i promise to leave you never."

And a ray of hope kindled through the window,
But soon striked the mirror, which threw me into limbo.
The sunrays reflected back, under that mirror's tricks,
And before I could check,It had split in six.

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Aight @Moderator, the thread is done you can come clean up 🧹

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I m having tests this week 😓

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A masterpiece needs to be preserved.

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The Series ends: Feb 20th, 2023

ancient topaz
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Today

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Yu-Mei

No wonder i had lived my life
in thousand splits and shreds.
I tried so long to free myself,
I was still stuck in those unwanted threads.

Dead farmland over mountain tops,
I found me sleeping on snow covered crops.
Some scattered huts and warning signs,
say my fate has reversed, through the timelines.

When I got up in pain, stumbling on used arrows,
I inferred that a group of Mighty Eagles,
must've fought a bunch of Brave Sparrows.
My wounds cried that I was a part of that flock,
Fighting a war among tribes, trapped in deadlock.

The surroundings started fading, as I passed out.
I was carried by a touch, from a girl I know about.
And that's the most bizzare reccurence,
Hostile new lands but with 'her' strong assurance.

When I opened my eyes, I saw her polishing the sword,
A Beauty in warrior's disguise, the mistress of her fighting horde.
She walked towards me and grabbed my hand.
She was my love, whom I understand.

Suffered equal pain as I had suffered,
Soon a clarity sparked in the words she uttered.
That mirror responsible for my twisted tales,
was equally involved in tribe's painful wails.

"We have to save it!" Firmly she said.
It's a godsend gift, from that Druid that once fled.
They say she made it out of a pond's reflection,
with her powers you control time in all directions.

"I wish I had spent more lives with you!
But these war wounds are not letting me through.
So we pray before, the gift we fought for.
To let us breathe, and never separate us anymore."

Still holding my hand, she finally went to sleep,
I hold back my tears, with a silent weep.
The mirror stood tall, holding my pain,
I didn't look at it, if it's splitting again.

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empty sparrow
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The title is gorgeous

ancient topaz
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In the end- "Mirrors are just awesome"

empty sparrow
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Ahahah

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Amazing

runic depot
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you've got a whole universe in here :O

ancient topaz
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Start from beginning

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Search in pinned comments

runic depot
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oki thankuu

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Swipe right

runic depot
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i might read it tmrw bc it's quite late here -o-

ancient topaz
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Ohkkk

runic depot
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but thank you for sharingg

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i am happy when there is poetry for me to read :>

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Things I tried #0001

||I followed a particular pattern while writing the poems. If anybody noticed that I wrote first three poems as forward sequence and later ones in reverse order of events. I wanted to use it as a symbolism of the phenomenon of reflection by a mirror.||

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ilyt

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Not gay, but thanks for the love

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misty sparrow
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Wow

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❤️Those people who were giving their love, I wish they too can add on their own versions or stories in the form of poems into this post, to keep it alive. wave

Thanks

golden whale
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@ancient topaz This is so damn awesome dude...

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...I wanna learn how to write something like this 🤌🏻

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🥹 it's still here.

quiet wharf
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omg

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just so it shows below post own so i can find it

velvet light
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@sinful rose

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