Deers

[languid needle]

Yesterday, a deer jumped in front of my car,
It died with eyes open wide.
Tonight, with the moon shining high.
I search for a pack,
A pack full of deers.
Tonight, I’ll jump with them.
I’ll take my last breath – with eyes open wide.

[uneven kiln]

beautiful. I love this. Would you mind sharing more about this poem pattern? Is there any name to this 'technique/strategy'? Where else can I come across it? Thx

[languid needle]

Hmm I always write depending on my mood and things that happen to me. I try to put metaphors and repetition of some parts, I mostly write without rhymes (It just easier for me!) I write in a way that's called Free verse, it gives you alot of freedom in writing cuz' there's not really any rules to free verse, I hope this helps!! <333

[languid needle]

I really base my poems on the style used by lots of old and new polish writers, I can look for translations if you're intrested! I really recommend Wisława Szymborska, Adam Mickiewicz, Juliusz Słowacki and Jan Kochanowski!

[uneven kiln]

I see. Do you know "mobius strip"? I feel this poem is one. Have you intended so?

[languid needle]

No I never heard about "mobius strip", what is it?