I found this VOD from your comment on a Radiant VOD. You asked if he could review your VOD, since he didn’t respond I thought I’d shoot my shot. The one thing I saw install upon watching the first few fights is your movement. I am pretty sure this is the NO1 thing holding you back mechanical wise.
I list up what you do when you shoot:
-You see enemy
-you start making baby jiggles left and right and shooting bursts between them
-you either get onetapped
-or you own them because your aim is really good
You should start making larger strafe movements left and right since this makes your head WAAAY harder to hit.
Imagine a player, barely moving left and right in contrary to a poppin swing. Which is easier for you to kill?
The first example of someone using a larger strafe against you was at 1:44. You shot at the Harbor who then moved almost two steps to your right whilst you made a 4 centimetre jiggle. You eventually owned him because as I said in a bullet point „your aim is cracked“ but overall he souls have killed you. He eventually even won that DM while you placed in the last third of the leaderboard. I think that should be enough proof.
I have the need to proof my point here since my rank is lower than yours, so you might not take my advice seriously. However I do think that if the radiant happened to review your VOD he would have come to the same conclusion.
If you want I can post a DM VOD of me here as well for you to review me. 😀
Good luck on your grind mate. You got that