#how can I make my short better?

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autumn sphinx
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Bruh

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Wait

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how can I make my short better?

lean lagoon
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Well for starters you cut off the first word

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The dots didn’t connect as wel. Like I was just confused the whole time

autumn sphinx
autumn sphinx
lean lagoon
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Less confusing will increase retention

autumn sphinx
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But what about this short makes it confusing?

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Too fast?

lean lagoon
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What was the objective of the short

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What was the key point and/or points that you tried to make

autumn sphinx
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To show which roblox games I would live in if I had a choice.

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But I kinda see what ur going

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There isnt really a full point

lean lagoon
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You scrolled by them so fast I couldn’t even really understand what was happening. The music is so loud compared to your voice that I really can’t even understand anything

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I’m supposed to be reading the names of the game and watching the bottom half of the thing? It makes no sense to me honestly. Information overload

autumn sphinx
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Right. So, even if I had a longer explanation about all the different things. You reckon people would still watch?

autumn sphinx
lean lagoon
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im gonna try to explain the main concern here but it might get complicated

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buckle up

autumn sphinx
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alr lol

lean lagoon
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so

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on the screen when you say "These Roblox Games 🤷‍♂️" you unintentionally direct my eyes to the bottom of the screen where the emoji is and then instantly cut to where the next information that is relevant is at the top of the screen. so im left looking at some random game where someone is jumping onto trucks and the point you are attempting to make has already passed by before i can figure out where im supposed to be looking

autumn sphinx
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Yeah right

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So, make sure the audience has time to know where they are looking and what they are getting

lean lagoon
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your objective with editing is to direct the viewers attention to what matters

autumn sphinx
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Yeah ok

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And with the different games. Do you think I should talk at a normal pace and let the audience know which games I’m talking about?

steady rampart
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@autumn sphinx If you want hard brutal advice

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the entire short is bad

lean lagoon
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uh oh

autumn sphinx
lean lagoon
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hes not wrong

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nothing makes sense

steady rampart
autumn sphinx
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I know it’s bad. But I want to know more on why it’s bad

steady rampart
autumn sphinx
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Right ok

steady rampart
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Sure I get that you're trying to go for like situation meme comedy type thing with the short

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But man, this isn't comedy, this isn't meme

lean lagoon
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I heard the words "nice place" and this is what was shown

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make that make sense

steady rampart
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like sure some people who are like really into roblox might get the subtle easer eggs

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but not all

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most won't

autumn sphinx
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Ok

steady rampart
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like for doors for example

lean lagoon
steady rampart
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you explain the game doors and make a meme out of it, but it's not clear whether it's doors

steady rampart
autumn sphinx
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True

lean lagoon
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go watch some shorts from similar creators, if i was you I would break them down cut by cut, word by word. take note of what they are saying and what they are showing. take not of how they get you to the point they are trying to make

steady rampart
autumn sphinx
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Yeah. I’ll try that

lean lagoon
steady rampart
lean lagoon
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where would you reccomend someone in that position starts then

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cause thats how i went about things, but i was quite different

steady rampart
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@autumn sphinx Look it's simple lets start with a question. K?
Do you want to build a community right now, or do your want to gaing followers quick?

autumn sphinx
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Uhm

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Gain followers quick?

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Wdym build community

lean lagoon
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people who like you for you, id imagine

autumn sphinx
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Oh yh

steady rampart
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Not just like Tiktok fans that don't even know you

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but like actual fans who not just watch your content

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but like stay loyal to your channel

autumn sphinx
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Actual fans

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Yep

steady rampart
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Great start, and great decision

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one tiny problem

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until now your only content strat is shorts

autumn sphinx
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Yes

steady rampart
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thats an extremely bad way to go about it

autumn sphinx
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Interesting

steady rampart
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especially when it seems that you have pretty decent ideas that in fact would be optimal for videos but you made it to shorts only

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possible video idea

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autumn sphinx
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Right

lean lagoon
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your packaging is actually pretty good in my honest opinion

steady rampart
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I'd doubt that's good packaging

lean lagoon
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i meant titles

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or ideas

autumn sphinx
steady rampart
lean lagoon
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indeed

steady rampart
autumn sphinx
steady rampart
autumn sphinx
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Ok

kind swan
lean lagoon
autumn sphinx
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Should I create it a video? Or not bc it's already a HOLY Heck thats a lot of words

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Or not bc its already a short*

kind swan
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but its been posted about

steady rampart
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@autumn sphinx Look here's what you're going to need to do if you want to build a community on Youtube

  1. Forget about the YoJo YouTube channel. You have 255 subscribers sure, but I'm assuming they're all from your shorts, since you've only uploaded shorts. Unless you showed alot of your personality in your shorts, which it seems like you didn't... those subscribers won't come over to your videos. That's bad, since they're your subscribers. YouTube is going to push your videos to those same people. They're most likely not going to click. Because they subscribed to you through shorts. They didn't subscribe to your channel because they liked it, they subscribed becuase they were mindlessly scroling. So yeah, scrap the YoJo YouTube channel.

  2. Make a new channel. Name it JoshuWooha if you want. Name it anything you want. For the description, don't do this "Subscribe to my channel so you don’t miss out on any gaming updates!". It's generic, and has no CTA. Do something rather more like "Subscribe for Roblox videos!" and post the subscribe link underneath. You just have to put ?sub_confirmation=1 behind your channel link. So for like YoJo it would be https://www.youtube.com/@yojotube4660?sub_confirmation=1 . When people click that, they're able to subscribe rightto your channel.

  3. Don't just post videos mindlessly in the new channel. Start with 3 to 5 videos start ight from the get go with the channel. <-- When you're in this step, you've gotten the idea, come back in the server and feel free to ask questions for thumbnails and titles and intros and other stuff. We're happy to answer them.

steady rampart
kind swan
lean lagoon
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CTA = Call to action btw

autumn sphinx
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I'll see how I go..

kind swan
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also think about if your gonna do youtube as like a hobby or like treat it seriously

autumn sphinx
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Yep ok

steady rampart
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@autumn sphinx

autumn sphinx
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alr

lean lagoon
steady rampart
lean lagoon
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i would imagine that to be an exit clause, am i wrong?

steady rampart
lean lagoon
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yeah, the no and yes go to the same place

steady rampart
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Well to put it simply (I could be wrong), but imo as long as your passionate about the idea, there's almost always a way to get around hard packaging.