Overnight @ Ice Hotel ROAST ME HARD (be honest)

[daring moon]

https://drive.google.com/file/d/1ub3qyQzpq8k7SKFq__JkFd8A0Np3m9em/view?usp=drive_link

Here's the first edit for my video, I really spent a lot of time and money so I want to get honest feedback so I can upload the best final edit possible, obviously there will be more subtitles as sometimes the audio is meh

Like, how's the hook, what about the satisfaction from the thumbnail/intro shot, what should I do better for the audio, music, sfx. Anything I should move or cut or that was bad?

[worldly mountain]

The intro was great but you should ad mored sound effects in the first seconds.

[daring moon]

Does the preparation/ driving there add to the story or should I remove it?

[worldly mountain]

You maybe can have some funny moment from there but i dont think its really necessary for the story

[daring moon]

So do you think I should trim or cut this part?

[worldly mountain]

Yes I think you should do that

[dim violet]

Comment 1: Solid Intro IMO however if you are titling this Overnight @ Ice Hotel but only your last minute is about over night? Was going into this thinking it was a challenge video but seems more like a travel vlog.
Perhaps it is "Exploring the Ice Hotel", "Chilling at the Ice Hotel" etc...

[mental sparrow]

NIce job! I thought the video may have dragged on a bit, but overall, really well done.

[dim violet]

Comment 2: I'm a fairy.. (3:52) feels out of place with other content IMO.

Comment 3: Recommend cutting anything that references peeing / bathroom

[daring moon]

Will keep this in mind thank you!

[daring moon]

Would it be better if after I explain that it melts every year, it cuts right away to "no way, it's real" no "preparation" bs

[elfin jay]

Thumbnail is fantastic 👍

Still watching, but wow! This is really good bruh! 👍

My only criticism so far… check your audio levels. The volume level is a little inconsistent.

6:42 – 6:45 audio is out of sync with your lips.

Love that it ends with you in a heated hotel 😆 👍

[daring moon]

Yes, it was really a struggle to film
Outside with the wind then using a gopro to stay lowprofile hard to use a lav with my snow coat and there was music most of the time

Thank you for taking the time to watch!

I'm gonna change a lot of details and make a final version

I'm still very happy with the experience and video I got 🙂

[daring moon]

Appreciate it Brian!

[abstract stratus]

hey @daring moon! Youve really stepped up your game from last time i saw your videos. I wanted to share a few thoughts below:

• your VO in beginning can be shorter and made as a statement vs the "...would you believe me? That's a lot of dedication" which doesn't add much (and also makes you sound a bit less confident)

• the subtitles moving around screen and the added emojis are distracting and cause eye fatigue. In general, you want to keep subtitles in same area so the viewers eyes aren't darting around.

• the mention about mushrooms and math teacher feels confusing. Was that meant to be a joke? Didnt come across. If you really want to sell the joke, try cutting the music and adding a sound effect but either way i dont think its funny and takes up precious time in opening. I get adding personality but the place to do that is after youve earned the buy in from the viewer especially if theyre new since youre still growing

• you need a better mic. Some of your audio like around :39 are hard to hear. Add simple subtitles to bottom to make it clear.

• these "little hand" graphics on bottom are super weird and distracting, i would cut

• this is a magic moment that comes way too late at 1:38. Too much time spent in hotel lobby and in transit. Try to get to here sooner since this what most people will be curious about. Namely, what's in like inside? What does the bed and sleeping situation look like with all the ice? What amenties does this hotel offer? etc

Last thing - your thumbnail says "-37 degrees" but that is repetitive since a) we know ice/igloos represent cold and b) you're wearing a jackset. Instead I would put in the price per night of the hotel or a small visual with a brief review like Ryan Trahan does with his latest thumbnails

[dim violet]

I wonder if he would update the thumbnail a bit, i could see subtle glow like a purple in the doorway to kinda set the stage for all the lights to come. I was not expecting it to be so beautiful like that inside, so what words would help hook the audience to that?

[calm spindle]

@daring moon can you render and drop me mp3 of your audio track with voice. Thats really great video and i would like to test some magic and maybe help with sound a bit :)

Probably it wont work, but worth trying

[elfin jay]

💯

[calm spindle]

@daring moon +++
on our discussion...yeah...almost 3 days passed, videos picking up...

so it probably hurts in begning , when video is bad for your subs...but in a long run wont matter...

[daring moon]

Same for me

Best CTR and best AVD I’ve ever had

Imagine if I can become good at intros

[calm spindle]

💪🏿

[scarlet sinew]

Hello fellow Canadian/Quebecer 🙂

I don't have much constructive criticism, but I just wanted to say that I've been to the ice hotel myself irl and, despite knowing what it's like, it was still super entertaining to watch. You did a great job imo ❤️

[daring moon]

Thank you 🙂

Yeah it was a fun experience but did not get a minute of sleep

Cool to see other people from here

Did you see that Brent Rivera came to Quebec a couple weeks ago for the ice hotel? We were there the same week

[jagged aurora]

Thumbnail is absolutely beautiful! No comments at all on that. Also, whoever edited this can edit pretty well but I think still needs some coaching on pacing and music/editing choice, may I ask if you edited this or commissioned someone on fiverr?

[daring moon]

This is a v1

(The first of 4 edits)

I rough cut and I work with a friend that does animation and aesthetics (the pretty editing that crashes my pc)

[jagged aurora]

Ohh I see, well its definitely headed in the right direction! Can i ask, whats your specific goal in the video? Is it the idea of being able to sleep through the cold, just showing off the cool place? or something else?

[daring moon]

It was to "survive" without being too "mrbeast I survived extreme cold" type and showing off the place because I thought it was really cool

[dim violet]

Felt like a travel along with us as we go to a very cold but beautiful ice hotel.

[solar slate]

Dud this thumbnail is amazing! One small thing, maybe the doors are distracting, and having the arrow and your hoodie be red might compete for attnetion, but great job! Need to do more photoshop lmao

Hey I love the video, but to be honest I'm not quite sure where the story is. If you're trying to survive, I'd have more in the beginnning showing and explaing how dangerous it might be, or how scared of the cold you are. After the intro, i'd like you to see you at the hotel, and the explain the stuff in the beginning throuhgout. MrBeast es a great example of diving into the action and giving context later. Also, I don't love your music choice it often drowns out dialogue and doesn't really set the mood

[jagged aurora]

I agree with these points, the narrative feels a little unclear in the video, the editing is quality but I dont think youre editing it the way it probably should or could all fit together. I'd love to help more with this video cause I see alot of potential!

@daring moon also i just sent you a DM with an extra idea

[glad jetty]

GOATED thumbnail WOW

[crisp whale]

love the thumbnail

[daring moon]

Thanks haha it's an old post I uploaded a month ago

[fallen mantle]

I hate the vid, mainly because of the beastification ah, like trying to be hyped also whispering at the same time, mrbeast's font etc. just why?

so many unnecesary cuts, and so many unnecesary scenes

there is more acting than documenting, that kinda feels fake and overexagorated, I believe the term is bs storytelling - I get that you are trying to make a story because you believe that story is important, but don't sacrifice authenticity for views for god's sake (no offence)

[daring moon]

Thanks for being honest

[maiden egret]

I liked your video. I would watch it because it is a curiosity. Good job. I would suggest that you rearrange it a little. Only show some of the hotel explorations in the beginning and then add some throughout the video. I know you had to wait to go inside but we don't have to. I wasn't sure what your purpose was. Am I traveling with you? Should I expect more travel videos from your channel? Who are you? Why are you doing this video? Is it on and done and I don't need to find you again? Good job over all.

[lethal echo]

Bro you are literally not even giving feedback I’ve seen you on every post on here and you literally hate on every video rather than giving valuably feedback. And also if you know so much where is your channel? And idk if I would trust someone who couldn’t even finish high school 😂🤦‍♂️

[shut monolith]

whilst i do agree that this vid would be cooler if it were paced down a little bit, it is the furthest thing from bs! Its a learning curve and a stepping stone towards success - you dont know unless you try. There isnt any constructive feedback in this comment tbh so outta interest what would YOU change SPECIFICALLY? Cos just saying its ‘awful’ aint helpful bruh…

im mean just to start with on why its good is that there has been clear thought and considerstion put into the vid - the thumbnail and opening scene didnt just ‘match’ by coincidence lol

[lethal echo]

Exactly, he does this to every post

[daring moon]

No I liked reading it, it's harsh but I dont take it personal and I appreciate it actually

For other people maybe you can say it's not your type or say it more constructively than I hate it, it's bs