#2025 grad LF internships

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untold bay
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Are you looking for software internships? If so, there are a couple things that stand out to me as immediately odd:

  • Inconsistent formatting - make the dates/location in education and experience match
  • Are you actually capitalizing the headings like "APP NAME" or "iOS INSTRUCTOR/MENTOR"? It looks really messy with this font
  • Given your lack of software engineering-related roles, I would switch the company name and position title for you
  • "Owner/Operator"
    • Don't call yourself the owner/operator. You can refer to yourself as a founder, a sole-proprietor, etc.
    • If you intend to take ownership of the business you're running, describe the business. There was an example in this channel that did this relatively well (there are a lot of takeaways you can get from their bullets that would significantly improve your descriptions as well): #1112204290275164213 message
    • Your bullets are very roundabout - it feels more like fluff than it does actual impact. Having specific details about the business will help. Don't tell us about minor feats like "presenting key business information" - it should be a given. Your bullets can be combined to convey a more straightforward signal:
  • {Something about you running this business, and it's general description}
  • Design a user-friendly and responsive website to market {product}, attracting 300 new visitors per month {look into metrics about ecommerce sites for better metrics like clickthrough, conversions, sales}
  • iOS mentor:
    • Similarly, bullets here can be reduced to eliminate fluff. If you can get metrics, even better
    • How are your debugging sessions "unique"? Items like this can ring BS radars for many people
  • Projects
    • Your projects are not clear to me. Don't just say what you did, explain what you're contributing to and why
    • Technical work is not consistently conveyed across each project
    • Hackathon should be in projects
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One thing that helps students step foot into internships is leadership/community involvement - university recruiters eat this up. Examples of this include: taking a leadership role for a club, volunteering for nonprofits, etc. I'd def consider exploring that

Overall, I think you need to be more direct in your points and explain the context/impact around them more (especially projects) - as it stands, your resume unfortunately feels unnecessarily padded for the sake of padding

pine wigeon
pine wigeon
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@untold bay I used some of the points you mentioned and also got a lot of feedback from people I reached out to on LinkedIn. Do you think I'm moving in the right direction or did I go backwards?

untold bay
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Eh... some parts are marginally better, but it's still pretty far from where I'd consider to be where I'd find it acceptable. Other than your education section, I'd say everything can use a lot more touching up. I'll give a little deeper feedback though:

The issues with the titles stay the same, though I'd still recommend switching the company and title if you're looking for software internships.

I'm also confused on why iOS Mentor was moved to leadership and involvement - it creates an "employment gap" in your experience, and makes your experience itself seem entirely non-technical. If you're looking at internships, the bg check won't be as strict bc they're not expecting you to be fully employed. I don't think there's any harm in keeping it in experience. Leadership and community involvement items usually relate to more org-related roles

In fact, if we're going to keep the sectioning this way, I'd probably push projects above experience.

I see you added metrics for your company, which makes it a lot better. This should still be rewritten though, and I liked the content of the last bullet of your old one - shows your ability to make business relationships and handle supply chain logistics. This should 100% be integrated into your bullets somehow. Same with the tech used for building the website (HTML, CSS, JS - if this is shopify-based, use that as well).

I also feel like as a sole prop, there is a lot more to talk about - the first and last bullets there feel awfully empty, and it feels like you're underselling yourself here. I'm not really able to offer specific suggestions without deeper context. Here's one way I might improve the second bullet tho:

  • Designed a user-friendly, responsive website using HTML, CSS, and JavaScript to market {product, don't just say business}, leveraging SEO techniques {"optimize" is redundant} to attract 300+ new visitors per month {are there any other ecommerce metrics you have?}
untold bay
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You can clarify the merchandise decoration part - it's not coming strong as-is, and I feel like there's a better way to word it.

You can also specify the types of clients (customers), which would help this be more specific and targeted

The assistant production manager position seems out of left field. There's a lot of issues I have with it:

  • It doesn't show relevance to software and it's an older position, so you should deprioritize this - it should not be taking up 6 lines of bullets
  • You led 8 people as an assistant manager? It's questionable at best. I would focus on some other responsibility/impact
  • No metrics - you're claiming to improve efficiency and quality with nothing to show for it
  • "enhancing a safe and productive work environment" is fluff

On iOS Mentor:

  • Can you change this to iOS Instructor? Seems to be closer to the description
  • "based on research found on sites such as GitHub and stackoverflow" says nothing
  • Remove all self-qualifers (diverse, distinct), i.e.,
  • Instructed 16 students in Swift programming fundamentals within an iOS app development course
  • Simulated real-world iOS development problems to teach practical debugging strategies {idk, this can be better}
  • Boosted student engagement how? Do you have metrics for this?

I also would've liked to keep the hackathon project you had on the old resume in the projects you have here. It added depth to your technical experience, making it stretch as far back as 3 years. You don't have to extend it more than 2 bullets, but I would like to see you discuss the overall project and its value. It's worth adding that it won the "Judge's Choice" category or something as one bullet too. There are a lot of resume examples where people include working on hackathon projects - would recommend going through them

untold bay
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For teammates, I would like to see you be more specific. How did you improve the user interface (what feature did you add)? How are you defining the improvement in usability? I also think the second bullet adds little value - unless you pushed for standardization, adhering to project guidelines is a given. The only interesting thing of note is that there are 500+ contributors. You also mention tech but don't integrate it into the bullets, making it unclear where your contribute is. There are also better ways to word this:

TEAMMATES (Open Source)

  • Added {X feature} to TEAMMATES, an open-source educational peer-evaluation tool with 500+ contributors and thousands of users
  • Utilized Angular, TypeScript, SCSS to contribute to UI features while adhering to code guidelines

For playlist pal, I'd recommend summarizing it a bit more clearly, and using metrics which are more sensible. Couple ways to do this (my head's rotting atm, so it's not the best):

  • Built an AI music playlist generator with user-driven personalization based in GPT-4 and the Spotify Web API

Second bullet also isn't exactly a good metric. Since this was a from-scratch project, you shouldn't have any further optimizations - it's all part of the development process

Do you also have any info on user metrics? That would give context. I would also do some organic marketing on this if it's a decent project (post on reddit/twitter)

Last bullet can be simplified and improved such that it's clearer. I'd use "Fine-tuned" instead of "Increased" and "over 2 months" instead of "over the course of the project"

Also, I didn't catch this before, but you should remove courses from the technical skills section - it's not really adding anything of value to your resume with basic courses

pine wigeon
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REALLY appreciate the huge amount of time you put into my and other people's resume on this server!!! I would provide some context to much of my resume, but I don't want to kill your tired head. Two quick questions though:

  1. What's your opinion on whitespace? With many of your edits, my resume gets whittled down to have like 4-5 lines of blank space at the bottom. I can fill it with a service desk job I held for a bit, but I don't know if that's "more valuable" than other positions I have. Could just leave it blank if that's your opinion.
  2. I think I misunderstood originally. When you say switch the company name and title, you mean to literally switch the position of the two so that the company comes first?
    Switch
Founder
company

to

Company
Founder

??

untold bay
# pine wigeon REALLY appreciate the huge amount of time you put into my and other people's res...
  1. You can play around w formatting to slightly widen the gaps between sections/entries (I think the command is vspace in latex)

Is the service desk job recent (at least after the assistant manager role)? Is it with your university? Does it involve customer-facing responsibilities or special skills? There are a number of employers who’d like to see it as it broadens out your overall employability

  1. Yep, that’s exactly what I meant lol, sorry I wasn’t clear
pine wigeon
untold bay
pine wigeon
untold bay
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That's also true - in your case, it's ultimately up to your responsibilities in the position that would decide whether it benefits your resume. If you're working with people, resolving issues, that kind of thing, I'd say it's more beneficial, but it's all in the way you're communicating it