Feed back on my first video

[worn cargo]

Last week I posted my first video and it did really well I just wanted to know what you guys think would really make it better for my next video or what needs to be fixed

https://youtu.be/gBvfLGQ4Xo4?si=a-RO8yiOKqjp3jQO

[inner saffron]

hey, i saw this channel and i just saw ur video, i like your style, and ur format. You're headed in a really great direction, pacing could help alot with your video, as some parts will kill your audience retention rate, something i myself struggle with. You should also try adding more sound effects as it keeps the video interesting, balancing both audio and visuals will make it more engaging to watch

you should watch sovietwomble for pacing
and maybe someone like smii7y for sound effects, you can see how both play around with their visual and audio.
@worn cargo

[worn cargo]

Ok thanks this helps a lot