.-. Juice corner

[winged crag]

Hello there! Welcome to the world of my failures and success! Please feel free to ask questions or just talk!

Some older work, a wee little dump!

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and a older one

more stuff from way back

gods the time i dabbled in ms paint!

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17 nov sketches

[ripe egret]

YOURE ART IS SOO GOOD

https://tenor.com/view/gohan-its-so-peak-gohan-crying-gohan-its-so-peak-peak-gif-11211568239007237362

[winged crag]

Thank you

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All i could manage today lol

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Sike take a frieren (even if i never watched the show)

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Study group ones correction: #1467302303747932171 message

Also realized this wasn't here, its from a older study group

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colour study

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the mc at the start of the story vs at the end

character sheets (there are four more impostant charcters left to make character sheets of

the prologue (may or may not keep lol)

more character art

[hoary lily]

ok without finishing it, the first thing i would say

is that u should colour the bgs

like the plain white takes you out of it abit

[winged crag]

So like black or something?

[hoary lily]

also no need for the verbs that say 'kneel' etc

[hoary lily]

yeah

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also u should probably type out dialogue

[winged crag]

Oh okay, i kinda saw it on a lot of manhua and picked it up lol

[hoary lily]

also on the 4th pic, i cant tell if it's the ruler or the long haired character whos laughing

[hoary lily]

overral this is decent

i thin the dialogue could be cleaned up abit

as well as all the stuff i previously mentioned

you could also use more clean shapes with the text boxes

just feels a lil unprofessional ?

but i like the characters

im interested in the story

[winged crag]

I mean i am a hobbyist lol

[hoary lily]

i'd say watch a few youtube videos on comic panelling, speech bubbles etc.

[hoary lily]

ik i mean like it just doesnt look like

i dont wanna say 'good' just again it takes you out

but yeah your art is good, story is interesting

[winged crag]

Any youtuber you'd recommend?

[hoary lily]

bad ink studios for text boxes and speech bubbles

[winged crag]

Okay so for that character he has like a ruined voice, any recs on how to do that instead. Its kinda important for the character cus hes like god, yes but one with severe burn scars

[hoary lily]

thestarfishface helped me abit too tho her vids are slightly more entertainment based

[hoary lily]

changing the font, adding texture to the speech bubbles, using speech bubbles in like a 💥 shape

this is an old page of an old comic where i acc did hand draw the text boxes, and i used a texture mainly for aesthetics but u could also use them for storytelling if other characters dont have them when they speak

obviously they'd have to be more noticable

ugh the anatomy on this page pmo

@winged crag but yeah this stuff is important bc no matter how good the art is, if the writing is unreadable people will disengage

not saying ur stuff is unreadable, but its def unclear in some places

[winged crag]

The thing is im using krita so getting text in there is a headache its easier to just write it lol

Guess my lazy days are over 🥲

[hoary lily]

yh lol

csp gets abit slow with the text but its not too bad bc it was made for manga so i cant fully relate to ur struggle

but if ur planning on posting this anywhere which i assume u are, u should rlly make sure that u dont cut corners

[winged crag]

Yeah. Ill probably import text boxes from power point or something, its less of a headache than kritas text function