How do I repair this?

[placid hearth]

After some exercises I wanted to make a piece for myself a little stylised but well it just looks bad. I feel like all the exercises I'm doing are not working. I dont know what happened can someoen help me? I don't know I hate how the lips turned out, I want to keep the colors simple but it just looks wrong

[plucky linden]

are u able to show it flat without any shading

also are u ok with the piece being drawn over to show what could be changed/improved

[placid hearth]

Yes

[plucky linden]

it looks good from here

[plucky linden]

imo here is where the anatomy gets a lil mish mashed

[placid hearth]

Yeah ur right

[placid hearth]

Okay so maybe you know, since yo uarw here maybe you csn help me with other thing? Because I kind of gave up on tjis piece

[plucky linden]

https://www.instagram.com/reel/DKJHDZqzP65/

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Draw head accurately with perfect loomis method #loomismethod #loomis#god_4bhi

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[placid hearth]

Can I dm you?

[plucky linden]

go for it

[frosty cosmos]

Take that with a grain of salt but personally I think the lips are what look off. The angle of the nose and lips seem wrong compared to the eyes (but especially the lips). They look like they were drawn from a front view when they need to curve around the face more since it is 3D. Take my illustration with a grain of salt though because I’m not the best at drawing lips and especially not on someone else’s drawing :’)

[placid hearth]

Yeah I get it, the lips are hard for me to draw I think the one you did look so much better

[frosty cosmos]

Here’s what I mean about the angles, they should all converge slightly when drawing 3/4ths (like when you draw a box in perspective)

[placid hearth]

Damn I always forget about it