#Star Wars Homebrew

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swift glen
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This is very much in it's infancy still and I hope to continue and grow this eventually to 2 different scripts (perhaps more). I've begun first on the Clone Wars era of the story. I have selected the characters for the script and have created many of their abilities but I know that there are major flaws that will need to be tweaked or completely overhauled. Specifically for the Clone Wars script, I wanted it to have a very Sects & Violets feeling to it. There is a ton of information but there's also many ways in which that information could be tainted.

I appreciate any and all feedback and I'm excited to put this thing together over time!

I haven't begun putting it into Bloodstar yet but here is the link to the google doc
https://docs.google.com/spreadsheets/d/1HJ2QZoFugZ3ob40AsN-aGTVfr6XaM5odifwuoKxCjGs/edit?usp=sharing

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R2D2's ability felt like a great idea when I had it in my brain but fell flat when I put it on paper. Not sure how best to fix it or if I need to scrap it altogether.

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Captain Rex: At one point I had the ability as just "neighbors" and not living. Same with the good player that registers. I'm not sure what would work better there. I feel like the living good player registering is complicated but could still work because of Nute Gunray's ability

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Yoda's ability, couldn't decide if it should be another alignment checker or another character checker. It may also be overkill on both of those and I just need to come up with something else altogether

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Kit Fisto, I couldn't decide if it should be a passive ability that the story teller decides when to do that or if it should be more like other once per game roles where they can choose what night it happens.

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And I'm honestly just totally stumped on Padme...

hushed jackal
swift glen
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I guess that could also be Padme's ability!

Each night, choose two players and learn one of their character types

swift glen
hushed jackal
swift glen
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Hmm, so would you change it to might register as good?

I just like the idea of having a demon that can register as good. Especially with it being Sidious. It feels very on brand

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Perhaps something similar to a Widow ping? So people know for sure that Sidious is in play and will heavily doubt alignment checking abilities?

hushed jackal
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i understand it sounds like a fun ability but the good team has no counter play to it. their abilities (save for a couple) are entirely useless. the demon similarly has no agency. it just makes for an unfun experience. if all information is unreliable, you no longer have mechanical reasons for executions and the game becomes pure social reads, you’re just playing mafia

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some other small tidbits (in no particular order, sorry):
-younglings should have an “even if dead” to be impactful
-yoda learning how many are evil is extremely strong: it’s stronger noble info each night
-anakin can only detect 2 abilities meaning it won’t proc most games, especially if the bag has neither of those abilities
-C3PO works online but would be hellish to storytell in person (perfectly fine if that’s not a concern)
-ahsoka might be better phrased as “When a player is executed, you may choose that if they are a Townsfolk, you die instead”
-senator organa is really strong because unlike juggler, whose info can be muddied by good players lying about their roles (mutant, sweetheart, etc.) you are purely checking their alignment. getting one of the demon roles confirms 3 good players, and even if you don’t, you have a confirmed noble-ish ping.
-Qui Gon needs a much stronger payoff for being killed by the demon. it’s only reward is to be a monk
-Nute Gunray needs to specify not the Demon or else we run into the earlier problem with demon misreg
-Order 66 payoff isn’t strong enough (see Goblin winning the game) and confirms itself as evil if 2 players die at night & tells town to disregard all info that night

swift glen
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Ok this is great feedback. Thank you!

I'll go do some work and figure out how to adjust and maintain the vibe.

hushed jackal
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i think an interesting and thematic change for order 66 could be:

Once per game, you may publicly claim to be the Order 66: evil players may act twice and all Townsfolk are poisoned that night.
Might be strong but hey seems pretty fun

swift glen
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Would Nute Gunray potentially be fixed if the ability was changed to "Each night, choose a player (different to last night). Their character and alignment register falsely until dusk. "

Still causes misregistration but they couldn't continue picking the demon every night? And so info could/would change and cause people to scrutinize anyone whose registration is changing

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Kindof like a Devil's advocate feel to it

hushed jackal
swift glen
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Hmm ok. I'll have to mull that over for a while haha

worldly briar
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Mace Windu:
just say out of play townsfolk.
also should probably be learn 3 one of which is out of play

Organa:
Seems quite strong for day 1 ability...
especially since evils often register as good...
You could change this so that it either triggers later on or they learn the information later.

Sidius:
To keep your original theme with sidius its ability could be: Each night* choose a player, they die. You register as good until night 3.
so n1 and n2 they register as good. and after that the veil reveiled. Other ways would be after x amount of misregisters they start registering as evil.

You currently have Yoda Padme and Mace Windu who are all almost the same.

For Padme I would suggest her political career should be felt in the ability. The Script seems to be on its first steps I can't comment much on what some abilities should be without knowing more about others.

swift glen
# worldly briar Mace Windu: just say out of play townsfolk. also should probably be learn 3 one...

Interesting that you feel like Yoda, Padme, and Mace are all almost the same.

Yeah I think Organa needs to be shifted somehow. Maybe it's that you can claim to be Organa and ask for three volunteers rather than choosing three players? That way evil has a bit more control over the potential outcome? I figured too that she would get info no matter what, but if the 3 players aren't all good that she would just receive arbitrary info. But the misregistration of evils is also fair to consider

I love the suggestion for Sidious... that feels like it still captures his essence. Thank you!

I considered something related to nominations for Padme but couldn't think of anything clever.

It definitely is first steps, so thank you for your help!