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chrome field Feb 16, 2026, 9:28 AM

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I'm still workshopping this from time to time, but I feel confident about it. Ready for someone to tear it apart

primal shard Feb 20, 2026, 5:47 AM

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Wow. This is deep. The intro was a little confusing, but eventually I got to the point I couldn't stop reading. There are a few grammatical errors that a read-through should fix. I'd also suggest that, if you want to get more dramatic, there are a couple of paragraphs you could break up and a few places where a one-line paragraph could do wonders with the severity of the tone, especially towards the end. Still, well done!

chrome field Feb 20, 2026, 10:17 AM

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primal shard Wow. This is deep. The intro was a little confusing, but eventually I got to the...

Thank you. I'll try and fix some places soon. What was confusing about the intro?

#A single bill.